haiku (eerie mist lingers)
Contest entry28 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
I love the look, the feel, and the sound of this haiku. The quietness of the misty Irish hills contrast the owl's screech. This is simple and elegant and filled with moods and emotions. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I love the look, the feel, and the sound of this haiku. The quietness of the misty Irish hills contrast the owl's screech. This is simple and elegant and filled with moods and emotions. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you for this excellent review, Sis Cat. I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery in the haiku, and I appreciate your taking the time to read and shre your thoughts. Thank you for your kind good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Your haiku has the right amount of syllables, reflects a distilled experience, it doesn't have a kigo, it has two juxtaposed ideas and it is descriptive. Excellent job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Your haiku has the right amount of syllables, reflects a distilled experience, it doesn't have a kigo, it has two juxtaposed ideas and it is descriptive. Excellent job!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your review and comments for my haiku, Gypsy Blue Rose. It does indeed have a seasonal,word--mist is a kigo according to my reference for kigo. Also, an owl is a kigo as well. So, you can take your pick. May I ask what a distilled experience for haiku is? That's a new one for me. Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed.
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Ok, got it. It is hard for me to find the kigo sometimes. The distilled experience is how haikus take a larger notion and transforms it to a moment in time. It is also mentioned in the contest requirements/info
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That must be in the other haiku contest that's up for a vote now. Distilled imagery is a term I've never heard of for haiku. Thanks.
Comment from ravenblack
Owl screeches are always haunting and must be doubly so when coming from Irish valleys shrouded in fog. Do I sense a banshee? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Owl screeches are always haunting and must be doubly so when coming from Irish valleys shrouded in fog. Do I sense a banshee? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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You got it, ravenblack. I wanted to use banshee in the aha line, but I figured I'd get too much huh? In the feedback. Thanks for your excellent review and comments. It hank you for reading and for your good luck wish in the contest. Thanks!
Comment from skye
eerie mist lingers
in valleys of Irish hills
owl screeches
Nicely done with good imagery and wonderful descriptive lines.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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eerie mist lingers
in valleys of Irish hills
owl screeches
Nicely done with good imagery and wonderful descriptive lines.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your great review and for taking the time to read and write a review for my haiku, Skye. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery.
Comment from inside echo
I really like this Haiku. You did some excellent writing here. Creative, and thoughtful. Has a very clear image, which I find most poems of this style do not.
Thank you for sharing this, Good luck in the contest, it is a great entry.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I really like this Haiku. You did some excellent writing here. Creative, and thoughtful. Has a very clear image, which I find most poems of this style do not.
Thank you for sharing this, Good luck in the contest, it is a great entry.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for this excellent review for my haiku, echo. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery of the poem, and thank you for your kind good luck wish for the contest. Thank you for reading and sharing your kind words.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your poem - haiku (eerie mist lingers) - fits the constraints of this type of poem ( with satori ) precisely. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Your poem - haiku (eerie mist lingers) - fits the constraints of this type of poem ( with satori ) precisely. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your review and sharing your comments for my haiku, Alan. I appreciate your kind good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from seaglass
Ireland with all it's mystery...one would expect this scene. Your haiku needed no illustration, your words painted the pictures and set an eerie mood.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Ireland with all it's mystery...one would expect this scene. Your haiku needed no illustration, your words painted the pictures and set an eerie mood.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you, seaglass, for this great review. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery of the haiku, and your kind words are appreciated very much. Thank you for spending time from your day to read and share your comments.
Comment from dmt1967
This paints a very vivid picture of an owl as it cries out for food or to call its mate. I prefer the picture you painted to an actual picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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This paints a very vivid picture of an owl as it cries out for food or to call its mate. I prefer the picture you painted to an actual picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for mentioning you liked the haiku without a picture. The goal of a haiku is to hopefully get the reader into imagine the scene with the words. Thank you for reading, writing a review, and sharing your kind comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good imagery created in this particular haiku entry for fog, mist, smoke or haze. Geesh, the administrator for this contest certainly wanted to cover all the bases. It's probably a good thing too, or the illustrious committee might have trouble discerning what is fog, and what designates a mist.
I like the fact that you've tapped into the disambiguation of audioception, rather than purely ophthalmoception--or sight--and incorporated the screech of an owl in your satori. It lends a bit more realism and another layer to the piece as a whole.
Well done, and best of luck in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Good imagery created in this particular haiku entry for fog, mist, smoke or haze. Geesh, the administrator for this contest certainly wanted to cover all the bases. It's probably a good thing too, or the illustrious committee might have trouble discerning what is fog, and what designates a mist.
I like the fact that you've tapped into the disambiguation of audioception, rather than purely ophthalmoception--or sight--and incorporated the screech of an owl in your satori. It lends a bit more realism and another layer to the piece as a whole.
Well done, and best of luck in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your review and comments, Dean. I bet the committee knows the difference between the topics for this haiku. Why say such a negative thing? Thank you for selecting my haiku to read.
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Because I can't stand the committee, I think they're all full of it...since you asked.
Regardless of what I think of them, I thought quite a bit of your poem.
Good luck.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful write, mystery writer, great imagery presented about the village enschrouded by fog and the owl that sounds out. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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this is a beautiful write, mystery writer, great imagery presented about the village enschrouded by fog and the owl that sounds out. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your review and comments for my haiku, sweetwoodjax. I appreciate your taking the time to read and shre your thoughts. Thank you for your good luck wish in the contest.