Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Cellar Stares"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
55 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Dean,
Brrrr...old basements! We have very few out here in the west but I do remember my grandmothers basement in Missouri, as a kid...used to give me the willies!
Nice build up of suspense, buddy, you always touch us where the sun don't shine:) and this story is no exception.
Hope you have a great weekend,
Bill
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Hi Dean,
Brrrr...old basements! We have very few out here in the west but I do remember my grandmothers basement in Missouri, as a kid...used to give me the willies!
Nice build up of suspense, buddy, you always touch us where the sun don't shine:) and this story is no exception.
Hope you have a great weekend,
Bill
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
Comment from rod007
I love this story and especially the last part which is creepy when we think of this insane creature out to devour little kids. Well done, Dean.
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I love this story and especially the last part which is creepy when we think of this insane creature out to devour little kids. Well done, Dean.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
Comment from DALLAS01
I was totally engrossed from the title on. The triple play on cellar stairs was ingenious. Anything dealing with the death of children is a tricky thing to navigate but you did an awesome job by lending it creative relief.
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I was totally engrossed from the title on. The triple play on cellar stairs was ingenious. Anything dealing with the death of children is a tricky thing to navigate but you did an awesome job by lending it creative relief.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from boxergirl
Fhahaha! "Coffin"!
That's funny Dean and your story was scary ...even though we now something is going to be down there, it still makes us hold our breath while we read. Great job with descriptive details. 8-)
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Fhahaha! "Coffin"!
That's funny Dean and your story was scary ...even though we now something is going to be down there, it still makes us hold our breath while we read. Great job with descriptive details. 8-)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi dean, what an excellent addition to your collection my friend, brilliantly written as usual with an outstanding storyline and the usual gruesome characters.
I read the demise of Billy No Pals earlier, also brilliant!
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Hi dean, what an excellent addition to your collection my friend, brilliantly written as usual with an outstanding storyline and the usual gruesome characters.
I read the demise of Billy No Pals earlier, also brilliant!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from RGstar
Dean, I don't know what or which cred of dialect was at the beginning, it would have been good to somehow referenced it in the story as it is important for the mind's eye and imagery...given the story is short...or perhaps it is known in chapters before? Effetive, never the less. The odd comma out of place, Dean, but yet another sound delivery.
Best wishes,
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Dean, I don't know what or which cred of dialect was at the beginning, it would have been good to somehow referenced it in the story as it is important for the mind's eye and imagery...given the story is short...or perhaps it is known in chapters before? Effetive, never the less. The odd comma out of place, Dean, but yet another sound delivery.
Best wishes,
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from ravenblack
Now that is what I call word play. Cewar stares, a Barbara Walters speech impediment making it seem as if the tyke is afraid of the cellar ( all kids are) or the cellar stairs or imagination making it seem as if the cellar is staring back. But nope- a mangling of Keller Shares. Wish I had a six left.
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Now that is what I call word play. Cewar stares, a Barbara Walters speech impediment making it seem as if the tyke is afraid of the cellar ( all kids are) or the cellar stairs or imagination making it seem as if the cellar is staring back. But nope- a mangling of Keller Shares. Wish I had a six left.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from Bill Schott
This one creeps right up my spine as I recall all the times I was sent to the cellar to fetch something or other and every fifth time there was a brother down there to scare me.
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This one creeps right up my spine as I recall all the times I was sent to the cellar to fetch something or other and every fifth time there was a brother down there to scare me.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Now I know why I don't like cellars - we are in a chalet bungalow, so haven't any creepy hidyholes.
"Jenny, hush up and gimme['] that darn flashlight. - not needed
Maybe then, Bobby would have heard him...coffin. -- haha - very clever.
I like these little HORRIBLE stories, Dean - keep them coming.
Margaret
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Now I know why I don't like cellars - we are in a chalet bungalow, so haven't any creepy hidyholes.
"Jenny, hush up and gimme['] that darn flashlight. - not needed
Maybe then, Bobby would have heard him...coffin. -- haha - very clever.
I like these little HORRIBLE stories, Dean - keep them coming.
Margaret
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I love these, Dean. I have a couple of ideas and may give one a try this weekend. If I do, would you read it first, please? Take care, my friend~Debbie
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I love these, Dean. I have a couple of ideas and may give one a try this weekend. If I do, would you read it first, please? Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
