2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desolating Grief "A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow. This is a really great little poem - so much is said in so few words, a whole story in fact. The 5-7-5 form worked beautifully for this, and I'm not at all surprised it won. Congrats!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Wow. This is a really great little poem - so much is said in so few words, a whole story in fact. The 5-7-5 form worked beautifully for this, and I'm not at all surprised it won. Congrats!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent review, i appreciate your feedback Dawn
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My pleasure, Gypsy. :)
Comment from inside echo
Very well written. Your authors notes are informative and are a great addition to your poem. Congratulations on your win of this contest. It is a well deserving win. Thank you for sharing.
echo
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Very well written. Your authors notes are informative and are a great addition to your poem. Congratulations on your win of this contest. It is a well deserving win. Thank you for sharing.
echo
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent review
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You are welcome.
Comment from Debbie Noland
Thoreau said he could hear trees cry out when they were cut, and this picture of the trees burned alive leads me to imagine a chorus of grief. Effective, symbolic color presentation with the red on black.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thoreau said he could hear trees cry out when they were cut, and this picture of the trees burned alive leads me to imagine a chorus of grief. Effective, symbolic color presentation with the red on black.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent review
Comment from CMac2
I love 5-7-5 poems that can say so much in just a few select words. Tree-hugger - I guess you can imagine the flames of the fire wrapping around the trunks of the trees and it sweeps through the forest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I love 5-7-5 poems that can say so much in just a few select words. Tree-hugger - I guess you can imagine the flames of the fire wrapping around the trunks of the trees and it sweeps through the forest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your review, I really appreciate it thank you for the 6 stars
Comment from Amy Greta
Wow! You conveyed so much emotion and imagery in just 3 lines! I lost my son, and even though it's been 7 years, it IS the longest lasting fire, I reached up to Heaven like I never had before and felt exactly like the picture above your poem; desolate. I can completely relate to your sensational haiku.
~Amy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Wow! You conveyed so much emotion and imagery in just 3 lines! I lost my son, and even though it's been 7 years, it IS the longest lasting fire, I reached up to Heaven like I never had before and felt exactly like the picture above your poem; desolate. I can completely relate to your sensational haiku.
~Amy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your review, I really appreciate it I am sorry you lost your son, the worse pain in the world, I hope I never feel it.
Comment from flip86
Congratulations! I love it and the picture that goes with it. It's asking for another re-birth as in pleading branches. What's left are ashes. One day, the sun, rain and wind will bring it back to life. I love your poetry.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Congratulations! I love it and the picture that goes with it. It's asking for another re-birth as in pleading branches. What's left are ashes. One day, the sun, rain and wind will bring it back to life. I love your poetry.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much for the 6 stars, I really appreciate your review
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You are very welcome. Thanks God for writers like you. You are an inspiration!
Keep it up!
Comment from justafan
In this your have spoken exactly what the picture shows. Wonderful work. The authors notes are tragic. Good luck in the contest :) Will be watching for it to start.
Always justafan,
Missy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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In this your have spoken exactly what the picture shows. Wonderful work. The authors notes are tragic. Good luck in the contest :) Will be watching for it to start.
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you justafan, I appreciate your review
Comment from RGstar
The havoc of a few words is certainly depicted in your image. Your thesis, however short, is certainly evident. The red letters heighten the expressive nature of the write.
Well done.
RGstar
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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The havoc of a few words is certainly depicted in your image. Your thesis, however short, is certainly evident. The red letters heighten the expressive nature of the write.
Well done.
RGstar
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you rgstar, I appreciate your review
Comment from GregoryCody
Whoa this is really good. You took a completely different take here. Your word choices are strong and the satori is solid. You have a great piece here. Truly. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Whoa this is really good. You took a completely different take here. Your word choices are strong and the satori is solid. You have a great piece here. Truly. Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you gregory, I appreciate your review
Comment from donalola
Beautifully done! I like very much your author notes. They give the poem a personality. It was quite clear in your haiku that the fire was devastating, but it is nice to know where.
Thanks for sharing it!
Donalola
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Beautifully done! I like very much your author notes. They give the poem a personality. It was quite clear in your haiku that the fire was devastating, but it is nice to know where.
Thanks for sharing it!
Donalola
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much donalola