Stuck in stereo (free verse)
Discontent played in stereo16 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job! A very impresive poem. I love the format. The colors are beautiful and so is the picture. I would make the font lighter so it stands out more.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Good job! A very impresive poem. I love the format. The colors are beautiful and so is the picture. I would make the font lighter so it stands out more.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Was working from advanced editor. Had to take what it had to offer.
Comment from Jay Squires
An interesting metaphor, MoonWillow. Memories are like the sound produced by vinyl records played on an old turntable. They distort across time so the strong emotions of Love and Hate ramp up
"regrets
in
distressed decibels-
stuck in stereo."
An intelligent poem, sounding deep-felt.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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An interesting metaphor, MoonWillow. Memories are like the sound produced by vinyl records played on an old turntable. They distort across time so the strong emotions of Love and Hate ramp up
"regrets
in
distressed decibels-
stuck in stereo."
An intelligent poem, sounding deep-felt.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I miss my old vinyl record collection. Love the line 'warping memories':) Great alliteration in distressed/decibels and stuck/stereo.
Teresa
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I miss my old vinyl record collection. Love the line 'warping memories':) Great alliteration in distressed/decibels and stuck/stereo.
Teresa
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, dallas, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the memories that distort our minds and plays over and over again. I enjoyed reading it
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, dallas, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the memories that distort our minds and plays over and over again. I enjoyed reading it
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nice! There is something special about a good old record player. And worry about scratching it! I thought you did a wonderful job of bringing back those memories for me!
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Nice! There is something special about a good old record player. And worry about scratching it! I thought you did a wonderful job of bringing back those memories for me!
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from humpwhistle
I really like this free verse poem--mostly because it's a real poem--not just flat prose with odd line breaks.
You have a created a true poem. You've carried your theme through without stretching the limits of your analogy.
I think this is very well done.
If I may suggest, 'Warping' but be more appropriate than 'Wrinkled'. Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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I really like this free verse poem--mostly because it's a real poem--not just flat prose with odd line breaks.
You have a created a true poem. You've carried your theme through without stretching the limits of your analogy.
I think this is very well done.
If I may suggest, 'Warping' but be more appropriate than 'Wrinkled'. Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Loved your suggestion, took it. I am really honored to have received the bonus star from such an accomplished writer. Thanks