Comment from petalangela

Excellent

These words reflect the way things were I when justice was instant.
There are times now when I feel it should still be so I yearn to see pea doohickeys swinging in the breeze.
Well written and deserving of a win

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Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did a n excellent job writing this poem about the noose that waiting for this villain who killed for sport. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the cotnest

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Comment from giraffmang

Good

Hi there,

This is a pretty fast paced story in a poem.

I think the rhythm may be a little uneven in places ( very variable syllable counts too).

Good description pieces and action.

GMG

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Comment from tennesseerose

Excellent

Great story in your poem and perfect aabb. I could see him doing all you described in my minds eye. And I felt for him; the music, the girl, the coming of death... Great work! keep it up!

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Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi mystery author, this is a truly awesome entry for this particular 'Old west' competition, beautifully told in aabb rhyming and proximate rhyming which has a wonderful flow and rhythm.
Good luck in the contest my friend.

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Comment from Lesley Collier

Excellent

An rhyming western poem of a wanted cowboy riding into town and knowing he is being chased by the posse and has little time enjoys the delights of a salon, whiskey, and a barmaid to fill his night who he then murders only to be caught and hung by the sheriff the next morning. Well written!

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Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Good job it's only fantasy, pretty scary lifestyle! I think I'll stick to the peaceful life and watch Westerns on TV! Good use of rhyming, tongue in cheek humour and well described setting and characters. Good luck in the contest. Faye

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