Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

I enjoyed your entry into this contest.

I can just see it happening too. cheeky little blighters get caught out by a smart little girl.

Good fun and appealing. good luck with it.

GMG

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

GMG, Thanks for the great review.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I give you credit for writing a gentle tale, while many others followed a more dramatic path. Odd that there should be two stories featuring treehouses, but that's of no account.
Personally, I like hyphenated phrases--though counting is always tricky. I think you're all right with this. Hyphens and contractions are great word-savers.

Hmm, a little kid-dialect, too. You remind me of someone who isn't you.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

I thought I saw a few 'pairs' in the titles - there's a Farewell to match your one, confession/Unforgiven and green Eyes/Shiner as well as the two treehouses...

I'm sure if I read enough of your stuff, eventually some of it has got to rub off. Prose is such hard work, though!

Thanks for reviewing.

reply by humpwhistle on 01-Jun-2015

You must be kidding! Poetry is hard.
I can throw a 'poetic allusion' into a prose piece, but I can't maintain.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I enjoyed this story. It presents the children in a typical playful, though squabbling scene. The hyphenated phrase should pass as one word and is a clever device.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks, Bill!

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct word count and a complete story. This is a delightful read as I enjoyed the colloquial dialog and especially like how she leaves the boys stranded in the tree. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Revenge is sweet! I can just imagine her struggling under the weight of the rope ladder as she beat her retreat. Girls have a way of having the final word in most circumstances!

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thank you. Actually, I was thinking of a wooden ladder, but that picture was too perfect not to use!

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

Ah, a story of sweet, light-hearted revenge where no one gets killed.
This story was very funny, especially the language you used. It was a perfect match for the theme and setting.
Excellent story, well told with a style all its own.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from tennesseerose

Excellent

Word count was correct. Love the story and the way it is presented.
Also, easy to follow and the surprise ending is wonderful. Good work! Looking forward to reading more from you.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thank you!

reply by tennesseerose on 01-Jun-2015

You are most welcome!

Comment from Debbie Noland

Excellent

This is a charming story of a childhood conflict between brother and sister, in which the sister is able to extract a much-deserved revenge with amusing results. The language is also a high point in this piece, providing characterization and local color.

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 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thank you!

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi...

_ This is so cute--a great entry.
_ Just leave it to a gal to 'reckon' things out. (*<*)
_ Good luck in the contest.

>>> Missing comma...
- muttered Sally(,) trudging off.

>>> Missing period at the end of story.
-she could lug it all the way home(.)

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)


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 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind review and the sharp eye - fixed now.