2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 75 "Died For Our Country"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from danpald
The time is right for this poem
To remember those now fallen
Not only the victims of many wars
Also the constant loss of life in crises zones
I never understand the difference
War or Crises are the same
Each have the loss of life to blame
Not on the soldier but political games
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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The time is right for this poem
To remember those now fallen
Not only the victims of many wars
Also the constant loss of life in crises zones
I never understand the difference
War or Crises are the same
Each have the loss of life to blame
Not on the soldier but political games
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you for your excellent review
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good job with the creativity here--using the red, white and blue font was a nice touch.
It's a sad way of life for many families who have loved ones serving in our military's armed forces. They are placed in harm's way on a daily basis, in danger at anytime of IED explosions, sniper fire, or small arms fire fights with insurgents.
Good luck to you on the contest, and Happy Memorial Day!
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Good job with the creativity here--using the red, white and blue font was a nice touch.
It's a sad way of life for many families who have loved ones serving in our military's armed forces. They are placed in harm's way on a daily basis, in danger at anytime of IED explosions, sniper fire, or small arms fire fights with insurgents.
Good luck to you on the contest, and Happy Memorial Day!
~Dean
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you for your excellent review
Comment from Pantygynt
That word "love" has many faces anmd of course this one comes to the fore this weekend when you guys across the pond have your memorial day. We have ours on the nearest Sunday to the 11th November in memory of the Armistice of 1918 at the 11th hour on the 11th day of the 11th month. Thanks for coming over and digging us out of the shit twice in the the last ioo years.
Nice little 5-7-5 too.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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That word "love" has many faces anmd of course this one comes to the fore this weekend when you guys across the pond have your memorial day. We have ours on the nearest Sunday to the 11th November in memory of the Armistice of 1918 at the 11th hour on the 11th day of the 11th month. Thanks for coming over and digging us out of the shit twice in the the last ioo years.
Nice little 5-7-5 too.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you for your excellent review
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is an interestingly presented 5-7-5 love poem in red, white and blue. The notes are interesting as well. Good luck to you, Jeanie Merceer
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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This is an interestingly presented 5-7-5 love poem in red, white and blue. The notes are interesting as well. Good luck to you, Jeanie Merceer
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you for your excellent review
Comment from meggie13
So many died for our Country, to make our lives better. To them we dedicate Memorial Day. They deserve this and more, for theirs was a great sacrifice. They left everything behind to serve this Country. To those that came home this Country should be proud and helped them in their daily needs . Most are homeless and unemployed. They should be their prerogative. Good picture used for your write and good imagery as well.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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So many died for our Country, to make our lives better. To them we dedicate Memorial Day. They deserve this and more, for theirs was a great sacrifice. They left everything behind to serve this Country. To those that came home this Country should be proud and helped them in their daily needs . Most are homeless and unemployed. They should be their prerogative. Good picture used for your write and good imagery as well.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you for your excellent review
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You are very welcome.:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is well worth a 10, but 6 is all I have. What better love has a man than to lay down his life?
Great red, white, & blue presentation.
THANK YOU TO ALL MEN AND WOMEN WHO ARE CURRENTLY SERVING, HAVE SERVED, OR GAVE THE ULTIMATE SACRIFICE FOR MY FREEDOM.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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This is well worth a 10, but 6 is all I have. What better love has a man than to lay down his life?
Great red, white, & blue presentation.
THANK YOU TO ALL MEN AND WOMEN WHO ARE CURRENTLY SERVING, HAVE SERVED, OR GAVE THE ULTIMATE SACRIFICE FOR MY FREEDOM.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you very much Jannypan, I appreciate your more than excellent review.
Comment from reconciled
there have been to many die in wars...my heart goes out to all who have fought and died...and to the families who have lost loved ones...very well written...and God Bless them all...Love Michael
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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there have been to many die in wars...my heart goes out to all who have fought and died...and to the families who have lost loved ones...very well written...and God Bless them all...Love Michael
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you for the excellent review
Comment from lancellot
This is interesting. Your syllable is good, although that depends on how you pronounce: 'our'. I advise caution on that one. The first line i would also look into again.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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This is interesting. Your syllable is good, although that depends on how you pronounce: 'our'. I advise caution on that one. The first line i would also look into again.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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thank you, our is has one syllable
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. I thought your theme powerful even if it is the sadder side of love when we lose someone. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
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reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. I thought your theme powerful even if it is the sadder side of love when we lose someone. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
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Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you very much Mystic, I appreciate the kind words and excellent review
Comment from TPAC
Very profound had to read it three times trying to understand the depth of the message
1 line sorrow of family
2 line government notice
3 line letter statement
might be deeper but as far I risk to go down hole Thanks for sharing
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reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Very profound had to read it three times trying to understand the depth of the message
1 line sorrow of family
2 line government notice
3 line letter statement
might be deeper but as far I risk to go down hole Thanks for sharing
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I don't understand your review, I can't tell if you liked it or not, but thank you for the 5 stars, I appreciate it.