First Light
There's promise in the dawn's first light46 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Jmf4119,
Charming piece of poetry meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its positive theme!
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth and enchanting flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"Each day begins a mystery
to solve before day turns to night.
If we obey the 'Golden Rule"
there's promise in the dawn's first light."
Superb!
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Jmf4119,
Charming piece of poetry meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its positive theme!
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth and enchanting flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"Each day begins a mystery
to solve before day turns to night.
If we obey the 'Golden Rule"
there's promise in the dawn's first light."
Superb!
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful, encouraging and most generous review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Nosha17
The use of the repeating line enhances the importance of the first light of day in our lives. Lovely imagery and excellent rhyming to convey your thoughts. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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The use of the repeating line enhances the importance of the first light of day in our lives. Lovely imagery and excellent rhyming to convey your thoughts. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Faye for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Eric1
Hi jmf, I truly loved this brilliant entry for this particular repetition competition , It has beautiful presentation a really good flow and a rhythm to die for!
Your exquisite rhyming lifts this brilliant poem higher.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Hi jmf, I truly loved this brilliant entry for this particular repetition competition , It has beautiful presentation a really good flow and a rhythm to die for!
Your exquisite rhyming lifts this brilliant poem higher.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Eric for your thoughtful, encouraging and most generous review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome my friend
Comment from Ekim777
Does not dawn personify renewal. Are we forever aware of this colorful reminder? At best we register mentally that our lives register the smoky reminder of our faith , belief, promise and other such vanities. When God has spelled it out for us in beautiful, earthly images that should tell us something. Our poet is handy with the images and the repetitive lines slip smoothly into place. What more could we ask for.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Does not dawn personify renewal. Are we forever aware of this colorful reminder? At best we register mentally that our lives register the smoky reminder of our faith , belief, promise and other such vanities. When God has spelled it out for us in beautiful, earthly images that should tell us something. Our poet is handy with the images and the repetitive lines slip smoothly into place. What more could we ask for.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from flamingstar
Love the repetitive, descending line. Every day is a fresh start and promises possibilities. A very tranquil poem that was a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Love the repetitive, descending line. Every day is a fresh start and promises possibilities. A very tranquil poem that was a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Waishali Deshmukh
I like your poem for its simplicity, easy musical flow and the positive message it gives. The use of "golden rule'' with double meaning is wonderful. All the best.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I like your poem for its simplicity, easy musical flow and the positive message it gives. The use of "golden rule'' with double meaning is wonderful. All the best.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from ameen786
Bravo! This ought to be a winner! Outstanding poem with lovely verses adorned in beautiful rhyming creating a vivid imagery, simply delightful! Good luck!
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Bravo! This ought to be a winner! Outstanding poem with lovely verses adorned in beautiful rhyming creating a vivid imagery, simply delightful! Good luck!
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from jennifdrake
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Kudos for rhyming without using awkward words! (My pet peeve.) Although you repeated the line in each stanza, they flowed smoothly and I even looked back to see if they were there -- in other words, didn't sound repetitive. I loved it. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Kudos for rhyming without using awkward words! (My pet peeve.) Although you repeated the line in each stanza, they flowed smoothly and I even looked back to see if they were there -- in other words, didn't sound repetitive. I loved it. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from BJ_Barnes
Beautiful poem! It flows together so well and has great rhythm. It definitely puts a picture in the readers mind. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Beautiful poem! It flows together so well and has great rhythm. It definitely puts a picture in the readers mind. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you BJ for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Healing
Very well crafted poem.
Lots of imagery here. Such a joy to read.
Very easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Ky
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Very well crafted poem.
Lots of imagery here. Such a joy to read.
Very easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Ky
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Ky for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet