Act of Endurance
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Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent alliteration with the "c" sound in the first six lines, and also with "b" in "being best".
Strong symbolism with the bee safe in the hive and especially with the fly struggling in the web with the "on coming spider". Good affirmation that we should be grateful for what we have.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Excellent alliteration with the "c" sound in the first six lines, and also with "b" in "being best".
Strong symbolism with the bee safe in the hive and especially with the fly struggling in the web with the "on coming spider". Good affirmation that we should be grateful for what we have.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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A true reviewer I holding aims to be such wonderful statement. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
The rhythm of this poem (song?) makes the reader feel a bit anxious. I'm guessing that's by design. By the time I got to the fly waiting for the spider, my heart rate had increased! Good work!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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The rhythm of this poem (song?) makes the reader feel a bit anxious. I'm guessing that's by design. By the time I got to the fly waiting for the spider, my heart rate had increased! Good work!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Feel this work was like a song interesting. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Tessa Kay
I like the progression from being in safe, familiar surroundings to being alone to feeling trapped in a spider's web. Unfortunately, the grass always seems greener on the other side. A very apt warning well put. :)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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I like the progression from being in safe, familiar surroundings to being alone to feeling trapped in a spider's web. Unfortunately, the grass always seems greener on the other side. A very apt warning well put. :)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this work. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.
Comment from buggaboo4699
I really like this poem. It flows well and I enjoyed reading and am going to add it to my book case. Good job and thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I really like this poem. It flows well and I enjoyed reading and am going to add it to my book case. Good job and thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
Thank you for generous rate, I'm delighted you found something in the expression to cherish, I've read a few delights, myself
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Your poem shares your belief that people should be content where the are. Nicely written poem with a cryptic message.
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Your poem shares your belief that people should be content where the are. Nicely written poem with a cryptic message.
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
Doctor doom, think young youth contaminated me Thank you for generous rate, to be content is to understand whom one should be with me between disasters
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Well put, my friend!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a thought provoking free verse. I like the differentiation between the two as the bee is merely stuck, implying an opportunity of freedom while the fly is trapped implying no way out at all. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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This is a thought provoking free verse. I like the differentiation between the two as the bee is merely stuck, implying an opportunity of freedom while the fly is trapped implying no way out at all. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
Very well stated capturing my intentions of aim, most sided upon death for both in original sketch -less words, came to this finish touch Thank you for all
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, tpac, you did an excellent job writing this proverbs like poem about being content where we are at. I spotted one line you need to change--life extremes bring confrontations instead of extremes brings confrontations. too many plurals.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, tpac, you did an excellent job writing this proverbs like poem about being content where we are at. I spotted one line you need to change--life extremes bring confrontations instead of extremes brings confrontations. too many plurals.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
Appreciate heads up will correct flaw and see if others as this exist, still you accredited me with excellent, I do thank you
Comment from Nelle Louise
Seems to me that the confrontations weren't that at all. Perhaps human confrontations would have worked better to get the point across. Nelle
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Seems to me that the confrontations weren't that at all. Perhaps human confrontations would have worked better to get the point across. Nelle
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
No. I'm happy after all its about me, at last someone who appreciates, I thank you I feel at home
Comment from emkoutny
Very nice imagery used here. I like the extended insect metaphor of the bee, fly and spider. Sometimes we all feel like we are trapped in webs of our own making.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Very nice imagery used here. I like the extended insect metaphor of the bee, fly and spider. Sometimes we all feel like we are trapped in webs of our own making.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
I'm not famous but famous people make quotes, this is my first, I think she stays Appreciate all thanks
Comment from Nosha17
I agree, a peaceful life, accepting our lot is far better than always desiring more. Well chosen words and good message. I spotted couple of things: Line 1, life's extremes bring.......Last line spider's web. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I agree, a peaceful life, accepting our lot is far better than always desiring more. Well chosen words and good message. I spotted couple of things: Line 1, life's extremes bring.......Last line spider's web. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
Do appreciate words of encouragement if desired, don't give myself "A" mostly "C" in efforts and that's all my works Thank you