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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from Joyce Long
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Yes, life does seem to be full of ups and downs. It is how we handle them that counts. I am not ready for Down, Down, Down yet, but am getting closer. I do believe fate is to the newly born also. We are not told how long a life we will have except in eternity and that is forever in which place we are. Interesting.
Joyce 05-23-16

 Comment Written 23-May-2016


reply by the author on 23-May-2016
    Good philosophy, Jesus stated if you believed in him you wouldn't see death: no believers. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statement.
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
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Poetry is an art.Your poem is unique in it's own style and has helped me see the unity that can be found in a diversified style of writing , Great job.

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 01-May-2016
    I thought my writing style was crap, yet listening have hopes within. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging inspiratio n.
Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE
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Wow! This is such food for thought, and I sit already satiated, and yet. i could not resist a taste, and in consequence a complement, for such life enhancing nourishment!

For, I too often use seasonal metaphors and ride on autumnal winds, and fading outward magnificence. Yet, I see my gift of winter's work for a new spring regenerating from the rich soils of passing humus and our humanity becoming. Yes! G-one, but One with the DNA and all we know feeding our Uni-verse and God's creation of Earth.

Thank you, and colourful blessings while you rise and fall with the winds of love and life. Maureen*&*

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 02-May-2016
    Touch you. Lost hair on this one. At least maybe its open. Thanking you for generous rate and pleasing to me delights spoken about this write.
reply by A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE on 04-May-2016
    Keep the passion fire burning, blessings, Maureen*&*
Comment from Ricky1024
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downward fall is written by keep packing and appreciative and Powerful piece of work this artist has created here Rick Rich an ajective content as well as semen imagery thoroughly enjoyed this piece thanks for this freaky 10:24

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
    Feel the work has freaky intents. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statements.
Comment from foxangie123
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It is so correct that our actions do teach each available and out of instinct. I found this to be better yet it does seem to jump person to person. Keep em coming.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
    Yeah, I guess I did tumble some: pits. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
reply by foxangie123 on 22-Mar-2016
    You were on another writing site weren't you? Xo
Comment from Mary Jane Y
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Sorry but it was confusing to me. Wasn't sure what was happening with the broken sentences. Some of this was clear someone was very depressed but some of it sounded like they were tripping on drugs.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
    Yeah the thought was time and its cinal toll, sorry you use drugs: I too take asperins, only in extremes. Wish you feel better. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from prettybluebirds
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Excellent. You write some pretty deep stuff but you do a good job of it. I have been reading quite a bit of your poems lately. They are different to the extreme. Maybe that is why I like them

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
    Glad these works find delights. You made my day. Thanking you for your generous rate and inspiring comments.
Comment from kittykatnoel
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Nice ideas, I felt as though the language was off slightly. In almost every line it seems that you may be grasping for the correct words. Thank you for sharing your writing.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
    I tell you this work hold so many delights just can't seem to get proper feel, thanking you for generous rate and insight
Comment from alvina224224
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There are 51 references to 'self' in this piece - I, me, my, etc. Therefore I cannot help but become a little bored, although the author's description of his fall is all encompassing. I feel the event could have been better described with more reference to other effects on people, or surroundings, rather than himself.

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 Comment Written 27-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
    Tough piece but I will remain focused on the course chosen, thanking you for generous rate and advise
Comment from cflorian8
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If I am wrong about my interpretation please forgive me. I thought you were referring to life's ups and downs. If that's not it, please correct me. Although the imagery is there, the structure is hard to follow because of its hidden meaning.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
    First thanking you for generous rate, the work reflects seasonal change or going old, or was suppose to
reply by cflorian8 on 22-Jul-2015
    Thank you for your correction. With this in mind, I will look at your poem again. You are a wonderful writer, It takes someone who developed their craft to provide such visual imagery.