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Comment from royowen
I'm not sure suicide is a concept to a whale, they are certainly mysterious, attractive animals who are surrounded by a touch of mystique. We almost consider them as sentient creatures, who in some way empathise with humans, stories of rescue by dolphins, or fishermen, when shoals of fish are herded into nets. Beautifully written, the narrative had some nice rhythm to it, the narrative has good descriptive imagery, it was very much error free, I enjoyed this rendition, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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I'm not sure suicide is a concept to a whale, they are certainly mysterious, attractive animals who are surrounded by a touch of mystique. We almost consider them as sentient creatures, who in some way empathise with humans, stories of rescue by dolphins, or fishermen, when shoals of fish are herded into nets. Beautifully written, the narrative had some nice rhythm to it, the narrative has good descriptive imagery, it was very much error free, I enjoyed this rendition, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you Roy for your generous and detailed review.
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Most welcome,
Comment from patcelaw
It is a puzzle to the world and a concern why so many whales would beach themselves to die a death the is not pleasant. I have no answers why this could be happening. Blessings Patricia
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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It is a puzzle to the world and a concern why so many whales would beach themselves to die a death the is not pleasant. I have no answers why this could be happening. Blessings Patricia
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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No, it is a strange occurrence indeed. Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I never thought of beached whale in the way of suicide. Straightjacket also has wonderful imagery. Another well done poem in your series.
teresa
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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I never thought of beached whale in the way of suicide. Straightjacket also has wonderful imagery. Another well done poem in your series.
teresa
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Of course it may not be suicide as we understand it. How can we ever know? Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from RockyBallad
Wow! This certainly shows the conflict between nature and mankind, but in a more subtle way. Man, as intelligent as he is, does not know everything. Sometimes the 'why' of things escape us. You may want to review it (or have somebody else do it for you) for a little bit of grammar and punctuation. A comma in the wrong place, or missing, can change the meaning. :-) Otherwise, an excellent work.
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Wow! This certainly shows the conflict between nature and mankind, but in a more subtle way. Man, as intelligent as he is, does not know everything. Sometimes the 'why' of things escape us. You may want to review it (or have somebody else do it for you) for a little bit of grammar and punctuation. A comma in the wrong place, or missing, can change the meaning. :-) Otherwise, an excellent work.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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I have checked it out again and added a comma in the notes, also corrected a typo there. I couldn't find anything specific in the poem as regards punctuation. I agree with that it is important. Many thanks for reading and reviewing