Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Tonight You Had To Call Me"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from justafan
Brett, I can't really express how much I loved this. Having always been on the side your writing from, I can relate. Beautifully done, my friend.
Always,
Missy
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Brett, I can't really express how much I loved this. Having always been on the side your writing from, I can relate. Beautifully done, my friend.
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your continued support and comments. Appreciate them indeed.
Comment from petalangela
As this is a competition piece I have no idea who penned it but I do know it lilts and and drifts gently into my mid hanging there ....
Making think and making me wonder was written to me?
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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As this is a competition piece I have no idea who penned it but I do know it lilts and and drifts gently into my mid hanging there ....
Making think and making me wonder was written to me?
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. No, I originally did not write these lyrics for that reason but hey, your interpretation is yours. Know what I mean? Always glad when somebody tells me something I wrote affects them both good and bad. Appreciate it very much.
Comment from valerieellis
I enjoyed reading your poem, written from a man's point of view (don't see that nearly as often as from a woman's). The rhyme was excellent and the imagery was painted vividly. The only suggestion I have is the disconnect in the rhythm with the inserts of "she said" and "I said". It may just be me struggling to concentrate today (I certainly have very bad days and cannot follow along). Just a suggestion. Besides that, great job! Thank you for sharing. God bless :)
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I enjoyed reading your poem, written from a man's point of view (don't see that nearly as often as from a woman's). The rhyme was excellent and the imagery was painted vividly. The only suggestion I have is the disconnect in the rhythm with the inserts of "she said" and "I said". It may just be me struggling to concentrate today (I certainly have very bad days and cannot follow along). Just a suggestion. Besides that, great job! Thank you for sharing. God bless :)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments. My intentions with doing that was to make the conversation appear two way between him and her not just one-sided on his part.
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I understand. It very well may be just a disconnect for me since I struggle to read at times. God bless :)
Comment from Alan K Pease
You have done wonders to the phrase lifting us out into a cloud of your emotion of a love lost by her own doing. Lovely rhyme some proximate -accounting the rhythm through out the main part of the poem with a prose introduction. The single verses given consolidate the progress of the poem by description and are useful in doing so. As you say it is an old story with a facelift,
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You have done wonders to the phrase lifting us out into a cloud of your emotion of a love lost by her own doing. Lovely rhyme some proximate -accounting the rhythm through out the main part of the poem with a prose introduction. The single verses given consolidate the progress of the poem by description and are useful in doing so. As you say it is an old story with a facelift,
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support. Really appreciate them very much.
Comment from lakeport
Tonight you had to call me, indeed love is not all rose, that's very heartfelt expressed poem. I enjoyed reading it, Good luck at the contest. God bless you, Lakeport.
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Tonight you had to call me, indeed love is not all rose, that's very heartfelt expressed poem. I enjoyed reading it, Good luck at the contest. God bless you, Lakeport.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
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you are very welcome, Lakeport,
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you are very welcome, lakeport.
Comment from MissMerri
Excellent response to this difficult prompt, and as a lover of Country Music, I couldn't resist this country song. I could almost hear the music as I read the words. It has a definite beat, a story that is easy to believe, and a flow from verse to verse that keeps it rolling right along. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest. This is well done in every way.
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Excellent response to this difficult prompt, and as a lover of Country Music, I couldn't resist this country song. I could almost hear the music as I read the words. It has a definite beat, a story that is easy to believe, and a flow from verse to verse that keeps it rolling right along. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest. This is well done in every way.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you very much for your comments and support. I really do appreciate them very much.
Comment from I am Cat
You wanted more than I could give so we went our separate ways.
There it is... isn't that the way it falls so many times? I love the conversational tone of this... and yes, a new take on the "door" thing.
Well written and I think I've heard this conversation before? LOL
Cat
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You wanted more than I could give so we went our separate ways.
There it is... isn't that the way it falls so many times? I love the conversational tone of this... and yes, a new take on the "door" thing.
Well written and I think I've heard this conversation before? LOL
Cat
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from patcelaw
In my opinion this is a quite good entry for the contest. I enjoyed the read. The repeating of the line she didn't lock the door at the end then adding, but I sure did made the whole poem come together well. Patricia
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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In my opinion this is a quite good entry for the contest. I enjoyed the read. The repeating of the line she didn't lock the door at the end then adding, but I sure did made the whole poem come together well. Patricia
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and encouraging support. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This is a well-crafted piece of work from the author and you played the words in the writing prompt very well indeed. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This is a well-crafted piece of work from the author and you played the words in the writing prompt very well indeed. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you. Several comments received encouraging me along those lines. Appreciate it vewry much.
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Take care
Comment from mfowler
I feel like I've been sung to in a C&W ballad. This man has been let down by a cheatin' gal, who is ditched by her lover. And now he's decided after crying all the tears, he's had enough and he's going to lock teh door.Yes, teh plot of C&W song. But, that's what I liked. It was easy to follow, full of the angst and recrimmination that would emerge from such a situation. I thought your beginning and ending were perfect and a great way to interpret the plot. Totally original. Best of luck with this.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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I feel like I've been sung to in a C&W ballad. This man has been let down by a cheatin' gal, who is ditched by her lover. And now he's decided after crying all the tears, he's had enough and he's going to lock teh door.Yes, teh plot of C&W song. But, that's what I liked. It was easy to follow, full of the angst and recrimmination that would emerge from such a situation. I thought your beginning and ending were perfect and a great way to interpret the plot. Totally original. Best of luck with this.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support.