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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Eccles-by-the-Sea"Poems about the coastline
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Comment from Cindy Warren
You make it easy to imagine the sea creatures taking over the sunken town. I can also imagine the human ghosts wandering the streets where they used to stroll. I'll look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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You make it easy to imagine the sea creatures taking over the sunken town. I can also imagine the human ghosts wandering the streets where they used to stroll. I'll look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Nothing wrong with your imagination then. Thank you for your review.
Comment from tfawcus
Splendid poem in every respect. Your comparisons between what was and what now is, are perfect. I especially liked the prostrate soles in church, being harangued by a lobster, much the same under water, in that case, as it might previously have been above ground! Dabberlocks is a new one on me - what descriptive terms for seaweeds were coined in the olden days. Although I already knew something of the history of East Anglia, having had a sister living in Wymondham for many years, I learnt a little more from your poem. I also enjoyed the idea of the mackerel in the high halls and the conger in the cottage - both examples of effective alliteration. Your unglazed windows and unbarred doors also set up a great visual image in the mind.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Splendid poem in every respect. Your comparisons between what was and what now is, are perfect. I especially liked the prostrate soles in church, being harangued by a lobster, much the same under water, in that case, as it might previously have been above ground! Dabberlocks is a new one on me - what descriptive terms for seaweeds were coined in the olden days. Although I already knew something of the history of East Anglia, having had a sister living in Wymondham for many years, I learnt a little more from your poem. I also enjoyed the idea of the mackerel in the high halls and the conger in the cottage - both examples of effective alliteration. Your unglazed windows and unbarred doors also set up a great visual image in the mind.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you so very much for those six stars and I am so glad the piece gave you pleasure. One might almost say "Plus ca change de mer, plus ca le meme chose!"
Comment from petalangela
You poem is descriptive it is smooth,it has a certain lilt to it. The word build a vivid picture of water logged ruins an Atlantis where only the fish now live,
It surprises me though that these lost villages have not be robbed of artefacts by deep sea divers. Perhaps the angry sea looks after what it fought for
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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You poem is descriptive it is smooth,it has a certain lilt to it. The word build a vivid picture of water logged ruins an Atlantis where only the fish now live,
It surprises me though that these lost villages have not be robbed of artefacts by deep sea divers. Perhaps the angry sea looks after what it fought for
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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The process of inundation was very slow, giving the inhabitants, plenty of time (years) to remove items of value before final submersion. I doubt if the church bells were still hanging when the place finally disappeared. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for the history and geology lesson in your notes, along with the credit to the Bard for coining "sea-change". Your personification of the "lobster" in the third stanza and play on "soles" is very clever. I admired your abundant use of alliteration and wish I had a six to award this work that transported me in place and time. Cheers- Joan
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the history and geology lesson in your notes, along with the credit to the Bard for coining "sea-change". Your personification of the "lobster" in the third stanza and play on "soles" is very clever. I admired your abundant use of alliteration and wish I had a six to award this work that transported me in place and time. Cheers- Joan
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thank you Joan for this kind review. We all run low on sixes by this stage of the week. Nice to know it would have if...
Comment from Jay Squires
I LOVED this poem, Pantygynt. You obviously have a lot of fun with language. You massage and cuddle words, tickle and release. Your meter is sterling and your use of alliteration effective without being used to excess.
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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I LOVED this poem, Pantygynt. You obviously have a lot of fun with language. You massage and cuddle words, tickle and release. Your meter is sterling and your use of alliteration effective without being used to excess.
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Jay for this. You are the first one to find it. It's great to feel that this is off to a good start.