Orpheus and the Argonauts
a sonnet35 total reviews
Comment from BLACKDYKE
So true WJ, and told in a tight manner. Such
succinct poetry is sometimes difficult to
review but this is clear and bright. Your extended
remarks make it easy to understand and enjoy.
Not that it was nessesary, the old school
were taught ancient history. Good post. Eric
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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So true WJ, and told in a tight manner. Such
succinct poetry is sometimes difficult to
review but this is clear and bright. Your extended
remarks make it easy to understand and enjoy.
Not that it was nessesary, the old school
were taught ancient history. Good post. Eric
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for the very kind remarks, Eric. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. Thank for the encouragement. Debi
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My pleasure
Comment from jlsavell
w.j.debi, and Greek you have gone, most definitely. I love how you have interjected the verse of the Sirens' charm.. best wishes with the contest my friend.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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w.j.debi, and Greek you have gone, most definitely. I love how you have interjected the verse of the Sirens' charm.. best wishes with the contest my friend.. jlsavell
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for the kind words about the writing, Jlsavell. I appreciate the good luck wishes and the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Picture adds depth to this poem. Bachstory very informative. Action flows smoothly. Verse blend into each other well. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Picture adds depth to this poem. Bachstory very informative. Action flows smoothly. Verse blend into each other well. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the gracious comments and encouragement.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Very clever sonnet and a good entry for contest debi. Perfect iambic pentameter and rhyme in abab form. A good turn in stanza three and an excellent rhyming couplet. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Very clever sonnet and a good entry for contest debi. Perfect iambic pentameter and rhyme in abab form. A good turn in stanza three and an excellent rhyming couplet. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind words about the writing and the good luck wishes, Dorothy. I appreciate the analysis of the writing, and I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Hi Debi,
I don't know that much about Greek mythology but you have written a wonderful sonnet for the contest. Solid meter excellent rhymes story is well told, excellent turn in the third verse and a first-class couplet that any writer can identify with. Well deserving of six stars. Good luck in the contest!
all the best, Rodger
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Hi Debi,
I don't know that much about Greek mythology but you have written a wonderful sonnet for the contest. Solid meter excellent rhymes story is well told, excellent turn in the third verse and a first-class couplet that any writer can identify with. Well deserving of six stars. Good luck in the contest!
all the best, Rodger
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the generous six stars and the equally generous remarks about the writing! I appreciate the well wishes, too. Thank you for mentioning the closing couplet. I wrote the rest of the poem and then couldn't figure out how to end it so it is nice to know it worked! Debi
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I'm sure glad you added the story in your authors notes, because I had no idea what you were writing about. LOL I know very little about Greek Gods or any of the lore. Just what I have seen in movies. You did a very good job here WJ. It sounds intriging. Can't wait for the Movie! LOL xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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I'm sure glad you added the story in your authors notes, because I had no idea what you were writing about. LOL I know very little about Greek Gods or any of the lore. Just what I have seen in movies. You did a very good job here WJ. It sounds intriging. Can't wait for the Movie! LOL xsx Nancy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you Nancy. Actually there is an old movie called Jason and the Argonauts--actors and stop action for the monsters. I used to love watching it when it came on the old tv kiddie afternoon shows. The station must have owned it because it seems like it came on quite often.
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. I realize everyone has different tastes so old Greek myths need a bit of explaining. I am glad you found the notes helpful.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and review. Debi
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Debi,
I'm not familiar with the story and you did a good job encapsulating it in this poem. I don't write sonnets, so I couldn't critique that aspect of the piece, but it sure flows to me. What a lovely notion - conquering with melody.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Hi Debi,
I'm not familiar with the story and you did a good job encapsulating it in this poem. I don't write sonnets, so I couldn't critique that aspect of the piece, but it sure flows to me. What a lovely notion - conquering with melody.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind words about the writing, Lou. I appreciate the encouragement. Hugs to you, too.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this was fantastic. I reviewed it yesterday but waited for Sunday to give it a six.
A superb story of Orpheus' music and his magic lyre that overcame the sirens' evil spell and let Argo sail past the treacherous islands. Your author notes are extremely helpful and contribute to our education in Greek mythology, which I find fascinating.
Flawless iambic meter, excellent metaphors and the use of vocabulary make it a delight to read. I especially liked your couplet, bringing home that sometimes the most dangerous weapon may not be a sword but a lyre (smile).
For not all conquerors use sword and shield.
Great power reigns in strains the Muses wield.
I guess, it applies to us, poets, too, and our Muses can be quite as dangerous (lol).
This should make a strong contender, thank you so much for joining us.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Oh, this was fantastic. I reviewed it yesterday but waited for Sunday to give it a six.
A superb story of Orpheus' music and his magic lyre that overcame the sirens' evil spell and let Argo sail past the treacherous islands. Your author notes are extremely helpful and contribute to our education in Greek mythology, which I find fascinating.
Flawless iambic meter, excellent metaphors and the use of vocabulary make it a delight to read. I especially liked your couplet, bringing home that sometimes the most dangerous weapon may not be a sword but a lyre (smile).
For not all conquerors use sword and shield.
Great power reigns in strains the Muses wield.
I guess, it applies to us, poets, too, and our Muses can be quite as dangerous (lol).
This should make a strong contender, thank you so much for joining us.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the great comments and the wonderful six stars. I appreciate the encouragement. Whether you know it or not, you are a bit of Siren yourself. I told myself at the first of the year I was just going to write to get the practice this year and I was not going to join any contests. When I saw the theme for this contest I told myself I would just follow it and see what everyone came up with. For sure I would read all the entries and vote. But then you sent out that little plea, "Where is everybody?" I couldn't resist. Whatever the result, I had a great time writing this one. I was going to go with Orpheus and Eurydice, but there was already an entry for that one. I loved "Jason and the Argonauts" as a kid so it seemed like the next step.
Thank you for sponsoring the contest and tempting me in.:)
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This contest is really shaping up as more people join. Wait till the last entry, and then read each one again - it is like taking Greek mythology class!
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I look forward to it. I love the myths so it will be fun to read them all.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an extremely interesting piece of work that the author has created with this piece of writing. The pen is mightier than the sword, or in tis case, the lyre is mightier than the sword. This brings it home nicely. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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This is an extremely interesting piece of work that the author has created with this piece of writing. The pen is mightier than the sword, or in tis case, the lyre is mightier than the sword. This brings it home nicely. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate the kind words.
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My pleasure
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Deb. This is great poetry from start to finish. I am not that familiar with the story but you have captured the essence very well indeed.
"But Orpheus upon his golden lyre,
with songs far sweeter than the Sirens' call,
unleashed those melodies that gods admire,
and overcame dark spells to save them all."
Good luck in the contest. I think you have a winner here, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Hi, Deb. This is great poetry from start to finish. I am not that familiar with the story but you have captured the essence very well indeed.
"But Orpheus upon his golden lyre,
with songs far sweeter than the Sirens' call,
unleashed those melodies that gods admire,
and overcame dark spells to save them all."
Good luck in the contest. I think you have a winner here, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the great review. I love Greek mythology and as a kid. I loved watching Jason and the Argonauts on TV. I appreciate the good luck wishes. Thank you. Debi
