Eleanor Rigby
Short Story42 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Mikey,
This is SO cleverly done. Very creative.
I'd vote for this one.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
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Hello Mikey,
This is SO cleverly done. Very creative.
I'd vote for this one.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from meggie13
This is a sad story but beautifully expressed. The mother neglects her son due to her alcohol vice. The state takes him under their care. He is not sad rather angry for being abandoned. It is well written with a good picture to match your words. Well done, using the theme of the Beatles. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a sad story but beautifully expressed. The mother neglects her son due to her alcohol vice. The state takes him under their care. He is not sad rather angry for being abandoned. It is well written with a good picture to match your words. Well done, using the theme of the Beatles. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Sad story of a boy who lost his mother to the scourge of alcohol. It has the melancholic feel of the Beatles Song. People have difficulty remembering lonely people who no one cares for. I love that song. Well narrated and with message. Good luck in the contest. Faye
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Sad story of a boy who lost his mother to the scourge of alcohol. It has the melancholic feel of the Beatles Song. People have difficulty remembering lonely people who no one cares for. I love that song. Well narrated and with message. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from happykat4
I think you did an excellent job with the title and song. The anger came through and forgiveness he says is not an option for him. Yet asking if any one is there? Who is there for him? Is it any wonder he is lonely and angry. His insecurity also shines through. Where does he fit in, and he deep down, wishes she would have been different...if not the case, why did he even bother to show up? It is a pity, but I know people like this. You are a well rounded writer. I've read some of your poetry and prose, a lot of talent.
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I think you did an excellent job with the title and song. The anger came through and forgiveness he says is not an option for him. Yet asking if any one is there? Who is there for him? Is it any wonder he is lonely and angry. His insecurity also shines through. Where does he fit in, and he deep down, wishes she would have been different...if not the case, why did he even bother to show up? It is a pity, but I know people like this. You are a well rounded writer. I've read some of your poetry and prose, a lot of talent.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from ravenblack
candle a cold flame, not giving heat - now that is lonely, the opposite of a communal fire. relief comes in that the candle can be lit, the ceremony continued after walking away ( no need to stay) and out. your last sentence is quite powerful. good luck in the contest.
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candle a cold flame, not giving heat - now that is lonely, the opposite of a communal fire. relief comes in that the candle can be lit, the ceremony continued after walking away ( no need to stay) and out. your last sentence is quite powerful. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I remember the Eleanor Rigby
song well - I like your short
piece for the contest, Michael.
Cleverly thought out and
well presented - good luck to you.
Margaret
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I remember the Eleanor Rigby
song well - I like your short
piece for the contest, Michael.
Cleverly thought out and
well presented - good luck to you.
Margaret
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved the way you've taken this song and made a story of it - and what a story it is! It's not at all what I imagined when I first heard this song, years ago. This is so well-done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, although I entered it, too.
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I loved the way you've taken this song and made a story of it - and what a story it is! It's not at all what I imagined when I first heard this song, years ago. This is so well-done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, although I entered it, too.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
This could not be better, IMO. The bitterness and hurt are so apparent - here is the offspring off a sick parent (for that's what alcoholism really is - a sickness) who can't find a way to reconcile the fact that consuming alcohol was more important to this woman than her child - so terribly sad, for both of them...
Most deserving of a six, but I just don't have any! Best of luck in the contest.
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This could not be better, IMO. The bitterness and hurt are so apparent - here is the offspring off a sick parent (for that's what alcoholism really is - a sickness) who can't find a way to reconcile the fact that consuming alcohol was more important to this woman than her child - so terribly sad, for both of them...
Most deserving of a six, but I just don't have any! Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
Working from the name and the lyrics, you couldn't hew closer to a prompt, I guess. And the story would stand alone. I wonder how far apart the penning of Pearly Spencer was in time and space from Eleanor Rigby? Excellent post.
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Working from the name and the lyrics, you couldn't hew closer to a prompt, I guess. And the story would stand alone. I wonder how far apart the penning of Pearly Spencer was in time and space from Eleanor Rigby? Excellent post.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
Comment from Glasstruth
Very haunting and elusive. Love how you bring Eleanor Rigby to life, I mean after her demise her son reflects on her passing and comes to the conclusion that we're all lonely in the same place. Great story! Les
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Very haunting and elusive. Love how you bring Eleanor Rigby to life, I mean after her demise her son reflects on her passing and comes to the conclusion that we're all lonely in the same place. Great story! Les
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015