His Voice
The sound of a voice can disturb to the core33 total reviews
Comment from NomaFaith
This is a real creepy story. I like it. My favorite lines are, "I'll now not know another man.
His only, I will be.
And soon my screams will pierce the air.
His voice; the death of me."
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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This is a real creepy story. I like it. My favorite lines are, "I'll now not know another man.
His only, I will be.
And soon my screams will pierce the air.
His voice; the death of me."
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thanks so very much...I loved what you said. It really was creepy, because these were actual nightmares I had years ago. Thanks again.
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Thanks so very much...I loved what you said. It really was creepy, because these were actual nightmares I had years ago. Thanks again.
Comment from norma-wrae
i can relate to that as i can see ghost and they will not hurt u they are there to protect you n to do unfinished stuff they need to
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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i can relate to that as i can see ghost and they will not hurt u they are there to protect you n to do unfinished stuff they need to
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi Norma...Yes, this nightmare was on-going for me years ago, so I appreciate your comments so much.
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Hi Norma...Yes, this nightmare was on-going for me years ago, so I appreciate your comments so much.
Comment from Ekim777
I suppose it is a woman's worst nightmare to be pursued by a male, even a ghost or a god; to be ravished by night and be abandoned by first light. Hence forth to be in his thrall. This is the stuff of legends and of this lady's poem. Surely be it man or woman, the only ghosts we need fear are those within us. Hauntingly, this poem might be a love poem. Who said love is eternal? -Ekim777
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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I suppose it is a woman's worst nightmare to be pursued by a male, even a ghost or a god; to be ravished by night and be abandoned by first light. Hence forth to be in his thrall. This is the stuff of legends and of this lady's poem. Surely be it man or woman, the only ghosts we need fear are those within us. Hauntingly, this poem might be a love poem. Who said love is eternal? -Ekim777
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Your comments were wonderful....yes, there was an emotional aspect of the actual nightmares I had. Thanks for your indight.
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Your comments were wonderful....yes, there was an emotional aspect of the actual nightmares I had. Thanks for your indight.
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning
I believe you have met the challenge
the choice of utilizing voice as the ghosts was wise
the entry is in beautiful poetic form and language
the ending stanza is very compelling
the entry in its entirety is well composed and executed
thank you for sharing your talent
this was a pleasure to read
good luck with the contest
ann marie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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good morning
I believe you have met the challenge
the choice of utilizing voice as the ghosts was wise
the entry is in beautiful poetic form and language
the ending stanza is very compelling
the entry in its entirety is well composed and executed
thank you for sharing your talent
this was a pleasure to read
good luck with the contest
ann marie
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi Ann Marie...I loved what you shared and thank you so very much!
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Hi Ann Marie...I loved what you shared and thank you so very much!
Comment from Delahay
This sounds like such a scary thing to have to live with. I know it is not meant as a real thing but you have made a good ghost story in your poem.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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This sounds like such a scary thing to have to live with. I know it is not meant as a real thing but you have made a good ghost story in your poem.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi Ward, thanks so much for sharing! This was an on-going nightmare years ago.
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Hi Ward, thanks so much for sharing! This was an on-going nightmare years ago.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Loanna,
You know, it's true. A voice can grate on you, scare you, or just plain tick you off. Definitely, scary is not good.
Great story in this poem as well. An excellent entry for the prompt. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi, Loanna,
You know, it's true. A voice can grate on you, scare you, or just plain tick you off. Definitely, scary is not good.
Great story in this poem as well. An excellent entry for the prompt. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hello Jax...so wonderful, always, to get comments from you, my friend.
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Hello Jax...so wonderful, always, to get comments from you, my friend.
Comment from Njorgensen
Love the premise and your approach for this poem writing challenge. You did a great job of slipping your "ghost" behind your story. The rhyming scheme really held it all together and made for easy reading.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Love the premise and your approach for this poem writing challenge. You did a great job of slipping your "ghost" behind your story. The rhyming scheme really held it all together and made for easy reading.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you so very much for reading this and sharing your thoughts! Thanks again!
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Thank you so very much for reading this and sharing your thoughts! Thanks again!
Comment from michaelcahill
Hi. Sorry to take so long to get to this, real world troubles. Wow. So very well written. I think you've hit it on the head. There is nothing more haunting or chilling than a scary voice. I can still here certain voices from my childhood that meant bad news. You're so right, just the sound of them triggered fear. Great piece. Good luck! mikey
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Hi. Sorry to take so long to get to this, real world troubles. Wow. So very well written. I think you've hit it on the head. There is nothing more haunting or chilling than a scary voice. I can still here certain voices from my childhood that meant bad news. You're so right, just the sound of them triggered fear. Great piece. Good luck! mikey
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
Comment from Deborah Marie
Really nice ghostly contest entry paired well with artwork, and color scheme. I like the way you use "his voice" throughout and "...the death of me" to end your well penned poem. Nice progression, rhythm and flow, too. Thanks for sharing and good luck in your contest, Deb
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Really nice ghostly contest entry paired well with artwork, and color scheme. I like the way you use "his voice" throughout and "...the death of me" to end your well penned poem. Nice progression, rhythm and flow, too. Thanks for sharing and good luck in your contest, Deb
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from krys123
LoannaLois;
+Picture is great and reflects, represents and along with complements your poem quite well.
+ Imagery is stunning and exquisitely expressive along with vividly descriptive throughout as it is a very chilling poem.
+ Rhyming quatrains done well with the rhyming words are contingent to the concept and thoughts of each line in which then makes the rhyming neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow.
+ Rhythmic timing, cadence, tempo and especially the meter were all helpful in making the meeting clear, fluid, smooth and easy.
+ Suggestion rewording a line: Your first line in the last verse may be helpful if it was written: "I'll (know not now) another man." hyou have it as "now not know".
+ I truly loved your poem because of your imagination which is gifted and truly inventive in ingeniously creative.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
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LoannaLois;
+Picture is great and reflects, represents and along with complements your poem quite well.
+ Imagery is stunning and exquisitely expressive along with vividly descriptive throughout as it is a very chilling poem.
+ Rhyming quatrains done well with the rhyming words are contingent to the concept and thoughts of each line in which then makes the rhyming neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow.
+ Rhythmic timing, cadence, tempo and especially the meter were all helpful in making the meeting clear, fluid, smooth and easy.
+ Suggestion rewording a line: Your first line in the last verse may be helpful if it was written: "I'll (know not now) another man." hyou have it as "now not know".
+ I truly loved your poem because of your imagination which is gifted and truly inventive in ingeniously creative.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015