Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

There is excellent imagery here in your little haiku.. with the stray dog slinking away. An excellent entry, I wish you luck I this contest!

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015

Hi Dawny :) Thank you for your feedback and good luck wishes... I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Stray dog needs to get with other stray dogs to huddle so don't get so cold

Like those smart pigeons...huddle for warmth

Well penned poem

God bless

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015

Hi Jenny, thank you for your great feedback :) kindest regards, Debra x

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

This is a thought-provokinh and cleverly written haiku, Debs.

Maybe I'm way off base, but my interpretation is the 'stray dog', who should be in charge of the pigeons, doesn't like being shat on by them.

Even if I'm wrong, thanks for the fun visual.

I love wood pigeons but hate their bedraggled looking cousins who hang around train stations bobbing their necks up and down.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray xx



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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015

Hah! Love your interpretation, Ray! My thought was that the greedy pigeons have eaten all the scraps and got comfy and the stray's slinking off in a huff! Thanks for your great feedback :) cheers, debs xx

reply by Domino 2 on 17-Feb-2015

Of course - I can see it now, Debs.

I stopped feeding 'stray' PIGEONS, as they always followed me home. ;-) xx

Ray xx

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015

Lol! They're horrible.... Almost as bad as seagulls! X

reply by Domino 2 on 17-Feb-2015

:-) xx