Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is a cynical and dark 3-5-3 with a touch of whimsy. The presentation is dramatic but rather over the top for such a short poem. Poem meets the syllable count requirements of the contest. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I guess this is a crime that the police would have a hard time solving.

I hope nobody gets ideas from this.

Well done, all syllables correct, good luck in the contest.
Mary

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 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

With respect, I have to be honest and say I see very little 'nature' here, as required by the contest theme.

I also wonder why SEVEN LONG lines of notes are required to explain just SEVEN words.

Anyway, it is witty and entertaining.

Best wishes, Ray



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 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015