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Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "senryu (one-ply or two-ply) "
Short poems poking fun at the human condition.

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Comment from DALLAS01
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This is a real winner. can't believe you didn't save it for a contest. The inner line rhyme works really well and the line of insight couldn't be more on point. Thanks for sharing this little gem.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
    And thank you for the sixer on a Saturday. Wow! I accidently bought one ply and that inspired the poem.
Comment from bhogg
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Well thanks for bringing a smile my way. Sometimes these little short form poems make you sit back and scratch your head .... not this one. Regards, Bill

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    I figured everyone could relate to this. :-)
Comment from Louise Michelle
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Hahaha - as soon as I saw the title I knew we were talking about toilet paper. Tissue's the issue - I love that. What irritates me (in more ways than one) is when people still use cheap, scratchy toilet paper. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
    LOL. Scratchy is right. I accidentally bought the one ply. What a difference a lay-er, I mean, a layer makes. :-)
Comment from livelylinda
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Spitfire: I loved this little poem! It made me giggle and I'm still smiling broadly. The play-on-words of the last line made me laugh out loud. Very clever! livelylinda

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    Thanks LL. I won't go into what inspired this. LOL
Comment from judiverse
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I'm not worrying my brain over toilet tissue, but this is funny. Great rhyme with tissue and issue. "Absorbing question" is great. Well put together, and you'll have us all thinking about this burning issue. judi

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    Do I sense some sarcasm in this? LOL You never know when Congress will fund a grant to explore the effects of each type on the private parts. LOL
reply by judiverse on 25-Jan-2015
    We'd best not suggest such a thing, huh? Someone may want the government to fund a study about which would save more paper. judi
Comment from catch22
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Hi Shari, these are the big questions in life-- whether to skimp on toilet tissue or not lol. Love the sarcasm in thos senryu and the notes are good for newbies to short forms like myself. Good word economy as well.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    Thanks, gail. Some people can't think outside the box (of one or two ply tissue. :-)
Comment from rama devi
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Fun pun in that closing line, An absorbing question indeed. Personally, when it come to that question, I like soft but strong. Totally dislike the thin stuff that breaks up as you wipe! ha ha ha. Good clever internal rhyme in line two. Excellent word economy.

Chuckling,
rd

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    How true, as I found out through dumb purchase. Now I read the fine print.
reply by rama devi on 25-Jan-2015
    :-)))
Comment from mshirachot
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Ba ha ha! And here I thought the real issue was over or under! I can see I have led a sheltered life. My personal choices are definitely OVER the roll. I have to confess I have actually changed it in other people's houses...lol. And two ply if it is thinner than rice paper. One ply is fine if fluffy!

Nice writing. Thanks for the laughter!
Blessings and hugs,
Marsha

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    Over the roll is the proper way. As I recall Dear Abby got the advice from a reader. Think of wallpaper in your house. You want the front side to show. Love it that you change it in other houses. Wonder if they notice. BTW I'm never found a one ply yet that is fluffy.
Comment from dragonpoet
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Cute and funny questions. Good last line. The answer to you question on the first line is in the last. Two ply because it is more absorbant. I like the internal rhyme in the middle line.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    Good for you. Yes, the satori is the solution. Thanks for dropping by.
reply by dragonpoet on 25-Jan-2015
    You're welcome.

    dragonpoet
Comment from gypsycaravan
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Another great one, Spitfire. You are definitely the master of this format. You are the only one on FS with the killer third line. Maybe that's why I like yours. I love surprises. Ha This one really deserves the six. Wish I had one.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    Thanks, gypsy. A virtual six coupled with your compliments is fine.