Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Perfect syllable count for the 5-7-5 prompt. Love the description. suggestion is indeed very powerful and you have used it well.
You do know how to say something without saying it. This piece can be interpreted however the reader wishes.
Good luck in the contest but I do think you have a winner

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015

I hope so. Thanks for the review and good wishes.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This sounds like casual sex at the office. I like the analogy to blooming weeds, shows how some people are like weeds in their behavior. Your words are true to life and reflect human behavior.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Thanks, mermaids. Appreciate your take on this.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Loved the play on words here, Spit. It literally drips with sexual innuendo and connotation. Of course, perhaps it could be just me, and I have a mind which is well seated in the gutter. Hard to say for sure. It would appear that business isn't quite as brisk these days in the sperm bank business, by the looks of all the weeds blocking the pathway. But the "back door entrance" business, well...thankfully that's still alive and well, at least in many bedrooms. LOL.

You've done it again...

~Dean ;)

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Drips with sex innuendo, exactly what I intended. :-)

reply by Dean Kuch on 16-Jan-2015

I can hear it drip...drip...dripping now, LOL.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is one of your best yet. I have to be honest, without the illustration I probably would be scratching my head. Absolutely marvelous and equally clever. How do you do this over and over. I wish I had a 6 to give you, but, alas, I am out.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

My hubby didn't see the picture and I had to explain it to him. Sigh...

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

full bush
sperm donor entrance

Oh, yuk! Only you would have the balls....errrr... boobs to post this. CLever, though. Verrrry clever. :)

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Inspired when I took a walk outside a medical building today while waiting for hubby. Tall blades of grass popped out of trimmed bushes. Ha,ha.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Am thankful you posted a photo with the poem - I'd have had a difficult time rating this one! Great point-match with the blossoming weeds and full bushes - only you could write 'sperm donor entrance' with a straight face. Like the creativeness. Fun read. Jean

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Thanks, Jean. Inspired when I took a walk outside a medical building today while waiting for hubby. Tall blades of grass popped out of trimmed bushes. Ha,ha.
Did you get my message that I loved your book, Dancing with Demons and I did read them at bedtime.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

This drips (excuse the pun) with clever and witty sexual innuendo, Shari.

So many interpretations and images could be gained by your metaphoric plays on words.

Excellent!

Cheers, Ray xx

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Gotta wonder where my mind is these days! Good thing I'm not young anymore. I'd be dangerous. :-)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha ha ......Drs office at a fertility clinic...??????this is very Patch Adams of you!!!

Chortling at this...well done
Anonymous suggestion....you should talk to an architect or landscaper
God bless

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Ha, ha. Thanks for the gardening tip, but why spoil a symbolic moment. :-)

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Very inventive. There are weeds trying to gain entrance. They are usually successful and probably more fertile than the more desirable flowers. Isn't that life? Like the numerous worthless guys who produce a lot of children without acknowledging them or helping raise them. Great analogy, and great last line "sperm donor entrance." judi

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Thanks, judi, for being a faithful reviewer too. I think of those gay guys though who won't pass on those genes any other way. Sigh...

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Ha! There's the senryu queen at her finest. Great visual of blooming weeds pushing through the full bush at back office door...sperm donor entrance. Oh my, the power of suggestion, you say. 8-)

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015

Wonder if it would work as well as porno films. Somehow I doubt it. LOL