Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

My lamp is dim, it can't burn bright -
its oil runs low this Christmas night.
Why do some children suffer so?
Why lose our wonder as we grow?

Anointed by my Saviour's grace,
why is it I can't see His face?
What a lovely poem Dawn. We can't help but wonder why, but we know it is because we have free will. The fault lies in us not it God> God Bless you. Nancy

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014

Thank you very much. Here?s wishing you and yours the very best of this wonderful holiday season.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I am sure we all wonder what our purpose in life is all about. It took a very long time for me to realize my purpose was and is just what i did and what i am doing now. God has blessed my life far beyond anything I could have imagined.
Merry Christmas, Patricia

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014

Thanks so much for reviewing - your reviews seem to reflect that you think I am actually writing about my own life, so that's very flattering - thank you. I do occasionally write personal views or relate something about my private life, but most of the time my writing, both stories and poems, is fiction.- based upon mere observation of life experience (others'), etc

Again, thank you for your kind review.

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

A thought provoking poem. you ask the questions and through observation and acceptance of the ministry of Christ you are able to answer them at the end of the poem.

life can be so simple but there are too many complications that we all are responsible for.
well written poem with good rhythm and rhyme.

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014

So true! Thank you very much. Here?s wishing you and yours the very best of this wonderful holiday season.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Dawn, you ask all the right questions to start your poem, and the answer at the very bottom, clearly gives the answer. Why can't we all just be nice to each other? How the world would change, how the children would change. How life in general would change. How much I wish your ending could happen all over the world. Beautiful poem, my friend, and pleasure to read and the bonus of listening to that incredible voice of this 8 year old child. She is one of God's Angels. :) Sandra xsx

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014

This little girl lost her Mom to cancer - I actually used a video of her in a much earlier poem (about two years ago now, I think) - she's amazing.

I guess that's the thing that gets to me at times, Sandra - how is it that we are still so blind? We're all one species, under one Creator. That's my belief, anyway, and in Christianity, we're taught that Christ was born and died to save us from ourselves (sinful natures) - His life was dedicated to showing us the way - to love one another as He loved us. Seems so simple a lesson (if a difficult path). He also taught by example, and spoke in parables - not shoving His lessons down our throats as some 'Christians' seem to feel the need to do...sigh...religion then becomes perverted (in my opinion) - just another way to be "one-up" on the neighbor...or worse, much worse.

Okay, I'll get off my soapbox now (LOL), but in all honesty, it bothers me because we should know better by now, shouldn't we?

Thank you, my friend. I'm so pleased you liked this poem.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 19-Dec-2014

I am with you, 100%, Dawn. We are in the 21st century, for goodness sake, yet we are going backwards, not forwards in enlightenment. What is the matter with everyone??

I didn't know that lovely child's mother had died, how tragic to lose your mother so young. My niece was the same, she was only 6 when her mother died, my brother's wife, he was devastated too, yet had to be strong for Sarah. Life can be so cruel to the wrong people at times. xxx

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This poem has the questions a lot of us ask. Some seem to know from an early age what they are meant to do, what their purpose is. You are right that action is more important than talk. But moving is the hardest thing to do.

Happy Holidays.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014

Thank you. Merry Christmas to you and yours.

reply by dragonpoet on 19-Dec-2014

You're welcome. Thanks for the holiday wishes.

dragonpoet

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think this is beautifully written, one your best poems, I think when you write about The Lord the Passion is unleashed! The rhyming was good, generally in couplets even when separated, which I don't quite understand, the wording is eloquent and the imagery and descriptive presentation is also lovely, well done, Dawn, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014

Dear Roy, I'm so pleased with these comments - thank you! Re: the formatting - in fact, none of the lines would be separated when published. (I separate for some on FanStory who don't seem to read poetry elsewhere a lot - just keeps it less confusing I guess...? But when I've published, the editors haven't separated anything into stanzas. Go figure. That's MY choice. LOL)

Thanks very much. Blessings to you and yours too.

reply by royowen on 19-Dec-2014

Thanks Dawn, well done, Roy.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Lots of excellent lines here, Dawn, and among my faves are:

'it's action needed, not more talk -
we've lost the path we're made to walk'

I'd prefer 'need' instead of 'made', but of course you already have 'needed' in 1st line. Maybe:

'required is action...' then 'need' could be used, but it's only MY personal preference.

I also really like:

'And as we lend a helping hand,
rejoicing's heard throughout the land'

Excellent meter, rhymes and enjambment.

Very strong seasonal statement of your faith.

Cheers Ray xx

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014

What a wonderful review, Ray - I'm thrilled! Thank you very much.

Merry Christmas!

Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

Another good poem my friend, with good word flow, and the rhyming is always excellent. Words to tell of the love of our heavenly father. Good work to post at this time of the year.

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 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014

Thank you very much. Here?s wishing you and yours the very best of this wonderful holiday season.

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Dawn. You have said it well in this one mate. I just hope we have passed the test. This is a beautifully written piece as always. You are such a busy person and I am always amazed how you can post so much beautiful work all of the time. Congrats. Cheers Fez

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 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014

Thank you very much. Here?s wishing you and yours the very best of this wonderful holiday season.