Assuming vs Knowing
Hidden truths in life...17 total reviews
Comment from LoannaLois
Just a wonderful thought-provoking poem. You needed no more lines or words to get your beautiful point across.That was an original and nicely written line of poetry.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
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Just a wonderful thought-provoking poem. You needed no more lines or words to get your beautiful point across.That was an original and nicely written line of poetry.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your very encouraging review and rating.
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Comment from Debbie Noland
This is nice and reminds me of Walt Whitman's "Out of the Cradle . . . ." I notice that you have essentially two lines in a contest that specifies one line, so I don't know how that will fly. But if you wanted to revise, you could make a couple simple changes without altering the sentiment: For example, you could take out the word "breathtaking"--the fact that you thought it might be a cry already implies something extraordinary.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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This is nice and reminds me of Walt Whitman's "Out of the Cradle . . . ." I notice that you have essentially two lines in a contest that specifies one line, so I don't know how that will fly. But if you wanted to revise, you could make a couple simple changes without altering the sentiment: For example, you could take out the word "breathtaking"--the fact that you thought it might be a cry already implies something extraordinary.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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Tanks Debbie, appreciate your review and kind rating. My computer shows only one line, other reviewers never mentioned a second line either. But thanks for the remark, I will keep on checking.
Comment from Nosha17
A bird has no other way of communicating other than its song or call. It may indeed have been a cry. Well chosen words and a lovely picture to complement. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
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A bird has no other way of communicating other than its song or call. It may indeed have been a cry. Well chosen words and a lovely picture to complement. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your very encouraging review and rating.
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Pupa
Comment from Enchanted2write
I have never heard of a Monostich poem, before. I should try to write one myself. I wondered if when we twit, could we be writing in Monostich?
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
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I have never heard of a Monostich poem, before. I should try to write one myself. I wondered if when we twit, could we be writing in Monostich?
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
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It's also my first Monostich, never heard about. Every day we learn something new, don't we?
Thanks for reviewing my line.
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Pupa
Comment from TAB_that's me
Your monostich poem is very good and makes us ponder if birds ever do cry. Good luck to you in the contest.
~~~~Teresa~~~~
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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Your monostich poem is very good and makes us ponder if birds ever do cry. Good luck to you in the contest.
~~~~Teresa~~~~
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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Thanks Teresa for your review and kind wishes.
Comment from el twelve
well written and felt those words with the wondering. I have three bird feeders and sometimes I also think that they are in distress or what might they be saying to each other, how intelligently they communicate.
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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well written and felt those words with the wondering. I have three bird feeders and sometimes I also think that they are in distress or what might they be saying to each other, how intelligently they communicate.
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Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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Thank you for reviewing and sharing your own experience and thoughts.
Comment from sbedian
This is a very short piece, but it shows good use of metaphor, the bird singing being the metaphor for expression and freedom. Birds are always a metaphor for expression and freedom, as of course they sing and fly, and I liked the commentary in this piece regarding those things. Five stars!
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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This is a very short piece, but it shows good use of metaphor, the bird singing being the metaphor for expression and freedom. Birds are always a metaphor for expression and freedom, as of course they sing and fly, and I liked the commentary in this piece regarding those things. Five stars!
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Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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Hi Saro, thanks for your encouraging review and stars. Most appreciated.