Dearest Friend
Spenserian Sonnet contest entry23 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
Great work my friend. I found the strength in the sadness filled my heart and also the longing of the past for things we could once master. Good contest entry and good luck with it.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Great work my friend. I found the strength in the sadness filled my heart and also the longing of the past for things we could once master. Good contest entry and good luck with it.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Fez. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from seaglass
I've had friends and relatives who consider a particular musical instrument as a friend. This sonnet describes that devotion. Just as human friends are cherished as they age, so would these musical kinships.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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I've had friends and relatives who consider a particular musical instrument as a friend. This sonnet describes that devotion. Just as human friends are cherished as they age, so would these musical kinships.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the great review, seaglass. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a very graceful and elegant Sonnet about a piano, chiseled to perfection. I can totally relate to it
because I played the piano since I was seven and owned several in my life. A piano is a big big part of my life as well. I like the expressions you used and your wit in comparing a piano's aging to a person:
Her iv'ry keys grow frail and thus do I
The picture is stunning.
Flawless iambic meter. Great turn in 9th line.
This may be the winner.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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This was a very graceful and elegant Sonnet about a piano, chiseled to perfection. I can totally relate to it
because I played the piano since I was seven and owned several in my life. A piano is a big big part of my life as well. I like the expressions you used and your wit in comparing a piano's aging to a person:
Her iv'ry keys grow frail and thus do I
The picture is stunning.
Flawless iambic meter. Great turn in 9th line.
This may be the winner.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review and the big sixer, Yelena. This was really actually written more from my mom's perspective. I can play a little but the guitar is more my thing. My mom has always played piano since she was young too. That's where this really came from. Thank you also for throwing another sonnet contest. I love 'em, lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars, Y. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Comment from JPilcher
As I was, very much embarrassing to even admit, skipping a lot of pieces that didn't appeal enough for me to read RIGHT NOW - this was very much refreshing to click on & see. The piano image - BEAUTIFUL!! The words flowed even more beautifully & the end was absolutely precious:
"But soon the grace of Heaven will restore
and there we'll sing aloud forever more."
So refreshing & just what I needed tonight!! THANK YOU!!! :)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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As I was, very much embarrassing to even admit, skipping a lot of pieces that didn't appeal enough for me to read RIGHT NOW - this was very much refreshing to click on & see. The piano image - BEAUTIFUL!! The words flowed even more beautifully & the end was absolutely precious:
"But soon the grace of Heaven will restore
and there we'll sing aloud forever more."
So refreshing & just what I needed tonight!! THANK YOU!!! :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, JP. I'm glad it hit the spot. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words, J. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is exquisite, and drew me in immediately. (It resonates with me personally because you have built this sweet, softly romantic sonnet around music, and mine was a musical family.) Flawless, and I would rate it accordingly, but I have no sixes left.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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This is exquisite, and drew me in immediately. (It resonates with me personally because you have built this sweet, softly romantic sonnet around music, and mine was a musical family.) Flawless, and I would rate it accordingly, but I have no sixes left.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review and the big six offer, Dawn. Yeah, my family was like that too. I wrote this really more from my mom's perspective. I can play the piano a little but the guitar's more my speed. My mom loves her keyboard though. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
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Oh, finally, I FOUND this LOL - new system? Blah! You're so welcome. I play guitar a tiny (very tiny) bit too, and love it.
Comment from emrpoems
you have accomplished a good sonnet and satisfied all the requirements of the prompt
good use of some alliteration
and excellent enjambment.
Time truly shows no mercy but we defy it with our memories
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you have accomplished a good sonnet and satisfied all the requirements of the prompt
good use of some alliteration
and excellent enjambment.
Time truly shows no mercy but we defy it with our memories
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the great review, emr. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's so sad and sweet. I'm no expert on this type of sommet, but as far as I can tell you've followed all the rules. It was a very enjoyable read.
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That's so sad and sweet. I'm no expert on this type of sommet, but as far as I can tell you've followed all the rules. It was a very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review, Cindy. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Ric Myworld
New to poetry and its many styles and structures, and not knowing a sonnet from sorbet, I'm forced to trust my ears and eyes to find what touches me. Singing aloud forever more in Heaven, touches me for sure. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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New to poetry and its many styles and structures, and not knowing a sonnet from sorbet, I'm forced to trust my ears and eyes to find what touches me. Singing aloud forever more in Heaven, touches me for sure. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Ric. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Ben Colder
I thought of our Baby Grand once loved and daughter learn to play. With age and time, we gave it to our church so it could always be used for our Lord. This stanza is my choice of your lovely write.
But time is just as harsh as it appears.
Her iv'ry keys grow frail as thus do I.
So seldom does her music soothe thy ears
when sadly aging bones can not comply.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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I thought of our Baby Grand once loved and daughter learn to play. With age and time, we gave it to our church so it could always be used for our Lord. This stanza is my choice of your lovely write.
But time is just as harsh as it appears.
Her iv'ry keys grow frail as thus do I.
So seldom does her music soothe thy ears
when sadly aging bones can not comply.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Ben. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your sonnet. It had great flow--as it should with the format criteria (that is all I can say about the format as it is still something that I am working on to learn). Your topic is great, and you expressed your love for the piano smoothly. I like the twist and the couplet at the end, too. All criteria seems to have been met. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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I enjoyed your sonnet. It had great flow--as it should with the format criteria (that is all I can say about the format as it is still something that I am working on to learn). Your topic is great, and you expressed your love for the piano smoothly. I like the twist and the couplet at the end, too. All criteria seems to have been met. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Jan. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. Once you learn the little tricks the sonnets will come pretty easily then, J. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.