Like Precious Wine
Shakespearean Sonnet contest entry33 total reviews
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Like Precious Wine". This is so very true about alcohol of any kind. "But sadly quite addicting is its curse". My neighbor is a very nice person, but she is addicted to wine. She can become so inebriated with a very short visit that I have to feel sorry for her and disgusted with her at the same time. You piece is presented so very well and I enjoyed the precious poem. Carole
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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To the author of "Like Precious Wine". This is so very true about alcohol of any kind. "But sadly quite addicting is its curse". My neighbor is a very nice person, but she is addicted to wine. She can become so inebriated with a very short visit that I have to feel sorry for her and disgusted with her at the same time. You piece is presented so very well and I enjoyed the precious poem. Carole
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Carole. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel to accomplish a good sonnet is like making good wine time and choice is the essence
good visual
good rhyme through out sentences
good enjambment through sentences allows flow
good use "N" "L" "D" consonance
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel to accomplish a good sonnet is like making good wine time and choice is the essence
good visual
good rhyme through out sentences
good enjambment through sentences allows flow
good use "N" "L" "D" consonance
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Smoothie. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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most welcome ..SC
Comment from Nosha17
I like the use of metaphorical language to describe the finesse of language used in writing a rhyming verse, in this instance a sonnet. I agree with you totally about the haiku and the Nonet! Excellent rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. I spotted an error, hope you don't mind, in the next to last verse, the verbs used are all in the present tense; thus, one would assume that lay was also meant to be. The verb lay in the present tense can only be used transitively (with an object) therefore the verb you need here is lie to waste. Hope this was helpful and good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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I like the use of metaphorical language to describe the finesse of language used in writing a rhyming verse, in this instance a sonnet. I agree with you totally about the haiku and the Nonet! Excellent rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. I spotted an error, hope you don't mind, in the next to last verse, the verbs used are all in the present tense; thus, one would assume that lay was also meant to be. The verb lay in the present tense can only be used transitively (with an object) therefore the verb you need here is lie to waste. Hope this was helpful and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Faye. Yes that was helpful. I sort of already new it but thought it sounded a tad more poetic this way. It doesn't seem that many people are catching it, lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars, F. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from LIJ Red
Rigorous and meticulous construction of any form will produce a tiny handful of great works and a multitude of floppy Haikus, etc. and petrified sonnets.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Rigorous and meticulous construction of any form will produce a tiny handful of great works and a multitude of floppy Haikus, etc. and petrified sonnets.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the great review, LIJ.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Not just a perfectly executed sonnet in true English connet form but the content is very clever. Perfect iambic pentameter, good abab rhyme throughout and a really good turn in stanza 3. Good use of metaphor and I love your final rhyming couplet. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Not just a perfectly executed sonnet in true English connet form but the content is very clever. Perfect iambic pentameter, good abab rhyme throughout and a really good turn in stanza 3. Good use of metaphor and I love your final rhyming couplet. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Dorothy. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from mikemagine
Ah, I do so like this:-) I think patience is a very rare bird these days - in pretty much every sphere of living. Take us back say ninety years or more...yes, THEN we are patient...:-)
I like your poem. Smoothly, you tell us of how to write a Shakespearean sonnet. I see no weaknesses in your poem, nothing that needs to be taken out or put in.
I like the message, the format, and the black and white colors.
Peace,
Mike
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Ah, I do so like this:-) I think patience is a very rare bird these days - in pretty much every sphere of living. Take us back say ninety years or more...yes, THEN we are patient...:-)
I like your poem. Smoothly, you tell us of how to write a Shakespearean sonnet. I see no weaknesses in your poem, nothing that needs to be taken out or put in.
I like the message, the format, and the black and white colors.
Peace,
Mike
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, Mike I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a good one.
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Ah, you bet.
Happy Holidays!
Mike
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You too, Mike.
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:-)
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Cute and clever, good wit too. Formatted expertly, likewise metered and rhymed. While there is a great deal of truth in the sentiment; tanka's and haiku's a merely mini sonnets. Good luck in the contest. Kenny
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Cute and clever, good wit too. Formatted expertly, likewise metered and rhymed. While there is a great deal of truth in the sentiment; tanka's and haiku's a merely mini sonnets. Good luck in the contest. Kenny
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Kenny. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from kanimozhi T
Dear Sonneteer,
I love the sonnet very much. Fantastic metaphor, like that of Keats' comparison of wine with his nitingale. And, your conclusion really noval.You've done justice. Thanks for sharing:)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Dear Sonneteer,
I love the sonnet very much. Fantastic metaphor, like that of Keats' comparison of wine with his nitingale. And, your conclusion really noval.You've done justice. Thanks for sharing:)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review and the big sixer, KT. I really appreciate the generous rating, friend. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from mfowler
This is the winner, I suspect. Too many great ideas, excellent craftsmanship, wit, and a perspective on sonnet writing that hits right between the eyes, for the rest of the meer mortal writers. I totally agree, that haiku and nonets simply don't satisfy after sonneteering. Sonnet writing is like drinking show wines compared to cask wine. Best of luck in show.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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This is the winner, I suspect. Too many great ideas, excellent craftsmanship, wit, and a perspective on sonnet writing that hits right between the eyes, for the rest of the meer mortal writers. I totally agree, that haiku and nonets simply don't satisfy after sonneteering. Sonnet writing is like drinking show wines compared to cask wine. Best of luck in show.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Mfowler. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from JPilcher
Yet another piece brilliantly written & even more brilliantly presented all together (between the image, background & don't color!)!!! This was such a fun read!!! I think I need to check out more of your stuff now!!!!! :) Jill P.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Yet another piece brilliantly written & even more brilliantly presented all together (between the image, background & don't color!)!!! This was such a fun read!!! I think I need to check out more of your stuff now!!!!! :) Jill P.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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You're welcome to do so, Jill. I'm sure you'd like a lot of my stuff. You have to wait until the voting's over to see who I am though because it's a blind contest. Thank you for the fantastic review, Jill. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.