Lady Lily
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Lady Lily and the Wizard 3"fantasy poem
25 total reviews
Comment from MaggieMcCall
Oh wow, this is really exciting and suspenseful. I can't wait to read more! I love poems like this that tell a story, especially the ones that are really epic and fantastical. Thank you so much for sharing this with us!
Maggie
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Oh wow, this is really exciting and suspenseful. I can't wait to read more! I love poems like this that tell a story, especially the ones that are really epic and fantastical. Thank you so much for sharing this with us!
Maggie
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review, MaggieMcCall. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from MissMerri
What an exciting story... And told in impeccable trochaic meter. I will be on the edge of my seat until I find out what happens to the dragon and the butterfly. This is exciting and well-written. I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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What an exciting story... And told in impeccable trochaic meter. I will be on the edge of my seat until I find out what happens to the dragon and the butterfly. This is exciting and well-written. I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank y for the great review, MissMerri. I apologize for the delayed response and want you to know I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and give encouraging comments. Thank you. Debi
Comment from c_lucas
Evil can never wind completely over Good. This is a very well written story/poem. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Evil can never wind completely over Good. This is a very well written story/poem. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review, Charlie. I apologize for the delayed response and want you to know I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Thank you for sharing your insights as well. Good will always win.
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You're Debi. Charlie
Comment from krys123
W.j.debi;
A great and powerful presentation and a continuation of a great fantasy story within a poem and written so very well that the rhythm itself moves smoothly throughout the writing. The rhyming is exceptional and neither forced nor labored and helps with the rhythmic flow.
In imagery is very compassionate to the point where the reader is rooting for the Dragon and the butterfly And not the wicked wizard. Also this imagery is truly demonstratively descriptive as well as exquisitely expressive: "Fearsome Joe began some chanting forming clouds to dim the sun. Magic sparked between his fingers
~Fiery ball was flung." One could actually see this fireball shooting across the room underneath the clouded sky. Very well done.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Debi.
Alex
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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W.j.debi;
A great and powerful presentation and a continuation of a great fantasy story within a poem and written so very well that the rhythm itself moves smoothly throughout the writing. The rhyming is exceptional and neither forced nor labored and helps with the rhythmic flow.
In imagery is very compassionate to the point where the reader is rooting for the Dragon and the butterfly And not the wicked wizard. Also this imagery is truly demonstratively descriptive as well as exquisitely expressive: "Fearsome Joe began some chanting forming clouds to dim the sun. Magic sparked between his fingers
~Fiery ball was flung." One could actually see this fireball shooting across the room underneath the clouded sky. Very well done.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Debi.
Alex
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Wow, such a nice review. I apologize for the delay in responding, Alex. I want you to know I appreciate the time you take to read and give detailed comments. It helps a lot. Debi
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You are so welcome Debi
Comment from jim lawler
This was a nice read and interesting. It has a smooth flow and is understandable. You choice of words is very good. I didn't see any typos and it needs no revision, Good luck with it! Jim
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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This was a nice read and interesting. It has a smooth flow and is understandable. You choice of words is very good. I didn't see any typos and it needs no revision, Good luck with it! Jim
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and make such encouraging comments. Debi
Comment from Nosha17
Fun fantasy story with well drawn characters and strong story line within your poem. Good use of rhyming and descriptive language. Has all the right ingredients, wizard, fairies, dragon. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Fun fantasy story with well drawn characters and strong story line within your poem. Good use of rhyming and descriptive language. Has all the right ingredients, wizard, fairies, dragon. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you for a very encouraging review, Faye. I apologize for the delayed response. I appreciate the time you take to read and review. It helps a lot. Debi
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Your story is very entertaining. A wonderful fairy tale in the making. Your rhyme and meter are smooth and easy to read.
One stanza stood out for me...
"I have come to slay a dragon
and to net a butterfly.
Most of all, my Lady Lily,
you will pay because you pry."
Lady Lily smiled so sweetly.
"Joe, I'd like to see you try."
LOL Very clever. Well done debi! Looking forward to more. xx Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Your story is very entertaining. A wonderful fairy tale in the making. Your rhyme and meter are smooth and easy to read.
One stanza stood out for me...
"I have come to slay a dragon
and to net a butterfly.
Most of all, my Lady Lily,
you will pay because you pry."
Lady Lily smiled so sweetly.
"Joe, I'd like to see you try."
LOL Very clever. Well done debi! Looking forward to more. xx Nancy
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Nancy. I appreciate the encouragement. That was my favorite part too. I apologize for the delayed response. I've been away from the site for a while. I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work. It means a lot to have someone of your talent take an interest. Debi
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Evil will always fight to win. Good watches and waits. But when the time come good will surely win. I followed this beautiful fairy tale and enjoyed it last time as I do now.
Beautiful language and strong expressions make it a must to read.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Evil will always fight to win. Good watches and waits. But when the time come good will surely win. I followed this beautiful fairy tale and enjoyed it last time as I do now.
Beautiful language and strong expressions make it a must to read.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the kind comments and very encouraging review, Benny Beeharry. I apologize for the delayed response. I have been away from the site for a while. I want you to know I appreciate the time you take to read and review my work. It means a lot. Debi
Comment from royowen
A nicely written poem about the nasty Joe, but I believe that Lady Lilly will be more than a match for Joe, well written poem is this, I loved the fact that the stresses you have created, have helped to improve the flow, this is articulate, with a nice imaginative work, and such a pleasure to read, I enjoyed this free flowing creative work, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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A nicely written poem about the nasty Joe, but I believe that Lady Lilly will be more than a match for Joe, well written poem is this, I loved the fact that the stresses you have created, have helped to improve the flow, this is articulate, with a nice imaginative work, and such a pleasure to read, I enjoyed this free flowing creative work, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful review, Roy. I apologize for the delayed response. I want you to know I appreciate the time your take to review and make such encouraging comments. Thank you for mentioning the form and meter. It helps a lot. Debi
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My pleasure
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, W.J.,
Another good installment with all kinds of things going on. Lady Lily's spell and Joes' shenanigans will not turn out well for someone. Fun read.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Hi, W.J.,
Another good installment with all kinds of things going on. Lady Lily's spell and Joes' shenanigans will not turn out well for someone. Fun read.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank to for the encouraging review., Jax. Sorry for the delayed response. I've been gone from the site for a while. I want you to know I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work. I am happy you enjoyed reading this one. Debi
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Oh, I love these little installments. I enjoy them. (*<*) Keep 'em coming!
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Thank you so much. I have three more parts done for this story. I just need to get them posted.
