The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 113 "Haiku (sweet pineapple)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You do an excellent job of using word play to talk about the pineapple and your satori is wonderful. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You do an excellent job of using word play to talk about the pineapple and your satori is wonderful. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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And thank you as usual for reading and your wonderful comments.
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One should not vote if one does not read all of them LOL. Gosh I am sooooooooo na•ve.
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Hmmmmm ... I just got a smile and a frown at the same time. Does that mean I am now straight line? What a bummer LOL.
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I am 'anonymous' and I can't admit to anything. LOL
Comment from faygrizzle
You have done exceptionally well. The photograph that you chose is perfect. You have described the fruit even though you had limited syllables to work with. Overall, content and presentation was superb.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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You have done exceptionally well. The photograph that you chose is perfect. You have described the fruit even though you had limited syllables to work with. Overall, content and presentation was superb.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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What a great review, I appreciate your kind words
Comment from DSMalott
Good.
Syllable count: 4/7/3 = 14. Contest requirements are met.
Great word play with 'pine' and 'apple' not producing the cherished fruit.
Thanks for writing.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Good.
Syllable count: 4/7/3 = 14. Contest requirements are met.
Great word play with 'pine' and 'apple' not producing the cherished fruit.
Thanks for writing.
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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And thank you for reading:-)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a clever haiku (or possibly senryu) involving a pun on "pineapple" - neither from a pine or apple tree. Nicely presented. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a clever haiku (or possibly senryu) involving a pun on "pineapple" - neither from a pine or apple tree. Nicely presented. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much for this wonderful review.