Free Verse Collection
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48 total reviews
Comment from yarnteller
Whether we like or not sometimes we're bound to time in one way or other. Great descriptive flow of words that had a tic toc effect. Enjoyed your poem very much.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Whether we like or not sometimes we're bound to time in one way or other. Great descriptive flow of words that had a tic toc effect. Enjoyed your poem very much.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thanks, yarnteller, for taking the time to read and review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Drew Delaney
The pic is really nice. But your free verse is really good, too. I love clocks, especially if they chime. I don't really care for a cuckoo clock although it brings beautiful memories of my grandparents who enjoyed theirs. I like - drips time, drop by drop - great alliteration and also compares to rain drop sounds. Very creative.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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The pic is really nice. But your free verse is really good, too. I love clocks, especially if they chime. I don't really care for a cuckoo clock although it brings beautiful memories of my grandparents who enjoyed theirs. I like - drips time, drop by drop - great alliteration and also compares to rain drop sounds. Very creative.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Drew, for taking the time to read and review. Glad you could relate to it.
Comment from jaeladarling
Time is an elusive thing. Wonder what would happen if we stopped counting it. Or at least paid attention to how we spend it. Great thought-provoking poem. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Time is an elusive thing. Wonder what would happen if we stopped counting it. Or at least paid attention to how we spend it. Great thought-provoking poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Jaela, for taking the time to read and review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from pattipac
Your poem about the constant metronomic dripping time drop by drop is a wake-up call to all those constant clock watchers, who wrap their entire day's scheduled events based on time.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Your poem about the constant metronomic dripping time drop by drop is a wake-up call to all those constant clock watchers, who wrap their entire day's scheduled events based on time.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks, so much, Pattipac. Back-to-back six stars! I am walking on air!
Comment from Just2Write
Wow... Excellent, Tony. I really liked the way that you were able to make time seem to slow. Excellent references to time and to the old, wind-up style 'moon' clocks and tie them metaphorically to the other moon in the sky. Rose.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Wow... Excellent, Tony. I really liked the way that you were able to make time seem to slow. Excellent references to time and to the old, wind-up style 'moon' clocks and tie them metaphorically to the other moon in the sky. Rose.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Rose. What a lovely review! :)
Comment from heyjude
tfawcus, a job well done. I can just hear the tick
tocking of the clock that drives us mad. I really
like the last part ... to cute the thread that binds us
to the metronomic madness of the clock.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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tfawcus, a job well done. I can just hear the tick
tocking of the clock that drives us mad. I really
like the last part ... to cute the thread that binds us
to the metronomic madness of the clock.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks for your review, heyjude. :)
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I apologize for not having a 6 for this excellent free verse poem. You've used rhyme very effectively for empahsis here. Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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I apologize for not having a 6 for this excellent free verse poem. You've used rhyme very effectively for empahsis here. Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks for your lovely review, Nancy. :)
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent use of alliteration in your opening
I adore "pendulous monotony"
excellent rhyme and cadence in to and fro they go
great internal rhyme in haze of bygone days
good assonance and consonance in dust suspended
good assonance in clock drop
wonderful alliteration and cadence in metronomic madness - which also creates mood most effectively
I LOVE this poem :-) My final six of the week. Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Excellent use of alliteration in your opening
I adore "pendulous monotony"
excellent rhyme and cadence in to and fro they go
great internal rhyme in haze of bygone days
good assonance and consonance in dust suspended
good assonance in clock drop
wonderful alliteration and cadence in metronomic madness - which also creates mood most effectively
I LOVE this poem :-) My final six of the week. Brooke
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Brooke, for your review and six stars. I'm delighted you enjoyed this.
Comment from mfowler
You've got a lovely clock like rhythm established in this. The free verse deceives in that the poem mimics the message, with a disciplined feel about it as I read. I think the left alignment, limited variety of line lengths, some rhyme and especially the use of phrase like 'to and fro; drips time, drop by drop', keep the poem 'ticking' along (pardon the pun). The core of the poem is revealed in the concluding verse where you say:
the cuckoo calls
to cut the thread
that binds us
to the metronomic madness
of the clock. ....clearly we are slaves to the clock, the calendar, and now the electronic diaries. Since time's been measured we've quantified out lives in a sort of artificial madness that overrides freedom and to some extent, love of life.
A novel write and a beautiful exploration of the free form (ironic choice).
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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You've got a lovely clock like rhythm established in this. The free verse deceives in that the poem mimics the message, with a disciplined feel about it as I read. I think the left alignment, limited variety of line lengths, some rhyme and especially the use of phrase like 'to and fro; drips time, drop by drop', keep the poem 'ticking' along (pardon the pun). The core of the poem is revealed in the concluding verse where you say:
the cuckoo calls
to cut the thread
that binds us
to the metronomic madness
of the clock. ....clearly we are slaves to the clock, the calendar, and now the electronic diaries. Since time's been measured we've quantified out lives in a sort of artificial madness that overrides freedom and to some extent, love of life.
A novel write and a beautiful exploration of the free form (ironic choice).
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Mark, for taking the time for such a detailed review. Appreciated.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Ah, the set up and style of this caught the Grandfather clock. They seem so lazy and not caught up in the madness of hurry that we seem to get caught in.
A good remeinder to take it a bit more slow, maybe walk like the pendulous pendulum...
padumachitta
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Hi. Ah, the set up and style of this caught the Grandfather clock. They seem so lazy and not caught up in the madness of hurry that we seem to get caught in.
A good remeinder to take it a bit more slow, maybe walk like the pendulous pendulum...
padumachitta
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks, padumachitta, for your review of my Clock poem.