Ain't That The Truth
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "senryu (plump half circle)"Short poems poking fun at the human condition.
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Comment from joann r romei
haha this was funny, and u forgot to mention the wolf howling in the back round, maybe thats the devil making his presence known,
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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haha this was funny, and u forgot to mention the wolf howling in the back round, maybe thats the devil making his presence known,
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Hold that thought, joann. Thanks ever so much for the sixer.
Comment from mermaids
God's mooning us is a wonderful line. It is probably true. Excellent haiku that uses the moon in a different way and shows a humorous side to the real moon.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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God's mooning us is a wonderful line. It is probably true. Excellent haiku that uses the moon in a different way and shows a humorous side to the real moon.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thanks for getting the humor, mermaids.
Comment from Muffins
Hilarious senryu. The photo does look like a mooning gesture. I can't believe the subjects you come up with to write poems about. The adjectives are juicy: Plump, glistens, mooning. It's light hearted fun. I hope no one becomes super sensitive about the last line and gives you a hard time.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Hilarious senryu. The photo does look like a mooning gesture. I can't believe the subjects you come up with to write poems about. The adjectives are juicy: Plump, glistens, mooning. It's light hearted fun. I hope no one becomes super sensitive about the last line and gives you a hard time.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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So far, so good, Muffins. Thanks for citing the word choices.
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your welcome!
Comment from Eigle Rull
HA! You've done it again, my friend. You must sit up nights, thinking about the subject for your next senryu poem. I love these. I wish I could do them, however, I'd better master the AABB first, huh. Then next will come the ABAB.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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HA! You've done it again, my friend. You must sit up nights, thinking about the subject for your next senryu poem. I love these. I wish I could do them, however, I'd better master the AABB first, huh. Then next will come the ABAB.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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I've given up on rhyme. Mine always sounds so artificial. I usually get inspired when I take a walk. Another one coming up shortly.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Was that photo an accidental find? Look closely and you see a tree branch forming a butt crack through the moon... LOL! If I were God, I'd wipe out ISIS, N. Korea, and a few other places...INCLUDING D.C. :)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Was that photo an accidental find? Look closely and you see a tree branch forming a butt crack through the moon... LOL! If I were God, I'd wipe out ISIS, N. Korea, and a few other places...INCLUDING D.C. :)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Yes, an accidental find. I saw the same thing you did. :-)
Comment from Louise Michelle
LOL - I love the irreverence! Actually, I'm using that same theme (mooning) in my next post. I thought of it before reading this. Really, truly. Twisted minds think alike, lol. A good one, Shari. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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LOL - I love the irreverence! Actually, I'm using that same theme (mooning) in my next post. I thought of it before reading this. Really, truly. Twisted minds think alike, lol. A good one, Shari. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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I have yet to hear from those with no sense of humor. Can't wait to read yours.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Funny senryu, Shari. Love the word 'plump' that leads perfectly into your great third line. You always come up,with unique and entertains senryu.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Funny senryu, Shari. Love the word 'plump' that leads perfectly into your great third line. You always come up,with unique and entertains senryu.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Karyn. Would you believe the inspiration for this was airplane lights. I thought it was a huge star at first, then it started moving!
Comment from drivenbackward
I never really understood why mooning was called mooning. After looking at this picture of the moon, I now have a better idea. As far as the poem goes, it looks God has a sense of humor.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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I never really understood why mooning was called mooning. After looking at this picture of the moon, I now have a better idea. As far as the poem goes, it looks God has a sense of humor.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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He definitely does. Earth is his biggest joke ever. :-)
Comment from judiverse
This is great. I wasn't expecting the humor in the third line. Yet your description leads up to it--plump half circle glistens white. I was sitting behind a woman at a program yesterday, and while I didn't get mooned, I saw a lot of skin over her slacks and was amazed by how really white it was. Clever, saucy attitude in this. Like your comment sometimes we deserve it. judi
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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This is great. I wasn't expecting the humor in the third line. Yet your description leads up to it--plump half circle glistens white. I was sitting behind a woman at a program yesterday, and while I didn't get mooned, I saw a lot of skin over her slacks and was amazed by how really white it was. Clever, saucy attitude in this. Like your comment sometimes we deserve it. judi
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thanks, judi. I loved your story. "Get yo' white ass over here." is literally true.
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from TamzinWhite
He does have a sense of humour.
Never thought of it like that.
Love the use of the word 'plump' to describe a half circle, as brings the moon to life and gives it a third dimension whereas if I drew it it would be very flat and 2-dimensional.
Great choice of words.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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He does have a sense of humour.
Never thought of it like that.
Love the use of the word 'plump' to describe a half circle, as brings the moon to life and gives it a third dimension whereas if I drew it it would be very flat and 2-dimensional.
Great choice of words.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Tamzini. My muse tossed me that word. :-)