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A love that took a bad turn.16 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your rhyming couplets tell a familiar story - a perfect-seeming love that does not stand the test of time - the lovers fall apart.
Although the story works quite well, I have deducted a star because I can't really see any sign of 'emotional dependency' here. There is an equality between your two lovers which makes it hard to see how one could be dependent on the other.
Steve
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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Your rhyming couplets tell a familiar story - a perfect-seeming love that does not stand the test of time - the lovers fall apart.
Although the story works quite well, I have deducted a star because I can't really see any sign of 'emotional dependency' here. There is an equality between your two lovers which makes it hard to see how one could be dependent on the other.
Steve
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from rjuselius
emotional dependency can be a burden for the person who needs alone time! i know i have a friend who calls me every other hour to ask what am i doing and where am i. it's tough. (sorry for rambling).
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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emotional dependency can be a burden for the person who needs alone time! i know i have a friend who calls me every other hour to ask what am i doing and where am i. it's tough. (sorry for rambling).
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from poetbear
Love the Swans.
This is melanchioly and painful to read.
I know very well about being and enabler and co-dependent.
I have sought helo and doing much better.
Being a martyr and taking it on the shoulder doesn't work.
Well written.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Love the Swans.
This is melanchioly and painful to read.
I know very well about being and enabler and co-dependent.
I have sought helo and doing much better.
Being a martyr and taking it on the shoulder doesn't work.
Well written.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you. I am glad that you are healing and I appreciate your taking the time to write a review.
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderfully constructed poem of rhyming couplets, the first two couplets however, let you down in their flow, I struggled with the flow as there seemed to be superfluous words in them, but you carried on and all turned out well, good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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This is a wonderfully constructed poem of rhyming couplets, the first two couplets however, let you down in their flow, I struggled with the flow as there seemed to be superfluous words in them, but you carried on and all turned out well, good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to write a review. I appreciate your input.
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You are very welcome my friend
Comment from Dom G Robles
I see deep emotions in this poem. The writer has beautiful expressions of the love life they had been with together. He/she wonders what happened to the love they cherished long time ago. And were so bitter of what had transpired. It had strong images. My sincere congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I see deep emotions in this poem. The writer has beautiful expressions of the love life they had been with together. He/she wonders what happened to the love they cherished long time ago. And were so bitter of what had transpired. It had strong images. My sincere congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your very encouraging review and for taking the time to write it.
Comment from Sanku
it is a sad tale of breaking up .invariably people end up hurt and scarred.The same people who were in love once become like strangers. Towards the latter part of the poem the person is wishing to back to the beginning.heated words exchanged in anger can have terrible effects .Very emotionally charged poem
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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it is a sad tale of breaking up .invariably people end up hurt and scarred.The same people who were in love once become like strangers. Towards the latter part of the poem the person is wishing to back to the beginning.heated words exchanged in anger can have terrible effects .Very emotionally charged poem
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to give such an encouraging review.