The Caretaker
Watching a saint. ( in five lines; a Gogyoshi)24 total reviews
Comment from gypsycaravan
As a former caretaker of two different family members, your poem resonates with me. The running, praying, lack of time for self, and the mundane things of cooking. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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As a former caretaker of two different family members, your poem resonates with me. The running, praying, lack of time for self, and the mundane things of cooking. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Yes, you understand well.Bless you, too. Thank you for writing.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Being a caretaker can be so rewarding, but so very sad when one is nearing the end of their life and all you can do it make them as comfortable as possible.
Having just lost 6 family members within a 4 month period, this poem hit home with me.
Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hi,
Being a caretaker can be so rewarding, but so very sad when one is nearing the end of their life and all you can do it make them as comfortable as possible.
Having just lost 6 family members within a 4 month period, this poem hit home with me.
Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Oh friend, Please accept my condolences and my thanks for all that you shared.
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Thx so much for your condolences. It was a grueling time, for sure. All of them died from the dreaded cancer as well. So sad.
Cheers (*_*)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is an excellent poem, written in just five lines as the prompt requires. I'm with you: God bless the caretakers of the world, for they have a hard row to hoe. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This is an excellent poem, written in just five lines as the prompt requires. I'm with you: God bless the caretakers of the world, for they have a hard row to hoe. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Blessings, Jeanie...For your comments and for your true understanding of it.
Comment from bard owl
YOu have described the most underrated individual in our society. Most of the time the caretaker of the house is virtually invisible. So very often her menial tasks are unnoticed. This is an excellent poem that shows the priceless worth of the caretakers of this world. This work deserves 10 stars.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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YOu have described the most underrated individual in our society. Most of the time the caretaker of the house is virtually invisible. So very often her menial tasks are unnoticed. This is an excellent poem that shows the priceless worth of the caretakers of this world. This work deserves 10 stars.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Again...you truly made me feel like a million...and you made my day.?..week.
Comment from DSMalott
Simple but poignant observation.
This is a nice tribute to those caregivers who work so hard to help others.
I loved the simple rhyming accent that bolstered this work.
Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Simple but poignant observation.
This is a nice tribute to those caregivers who work so hard to help others.
I loved the simple rhyming accent that bolstered this work.
Good job.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Bless you and your comments...
Comment from royowen
I like this entry in this gogyoshi poetic contest, it seems all the troubles of a housewife, serf, slave, are encapsulated in this noble woman's character, I think this an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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I like this entry in this gogyoshi poetic contest, it seems all the troubles of a housewife, serf, slave, are encapsulated in this noble woman's character, I think this an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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I love what you said, Roy. Thanks so much...
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello mystery writer,
This is beautiful in its simplicity and sincerity. I like the loose rhyme scheme. It works well.
Best wishes for the contest.
Until next time,
Sonali
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Hello mystery writer,
This is beautiful in its simplicity and sincerity. I like the loose rhyme scheme. It works well.
Best wishes for the contest.
Until next time,
Sonali
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Thank for reading this and commenting...thank you for what you said.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
That is a very difficult role to play. I have done it and the caretaker gets very tired, worn out and weary. You wrote about it quite well.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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That is a very difficult role to play. I have done it and the caretaker gets very tired, worn out and weary. You wrote about it quite well.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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So true...blessings...and thanks for writing.
Comment from Ben Colder
Not only is this piece right on with lines but the message as well. What would we do without the care takers. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Not only is this piece right on with lines but the message as well. What would we do without the care takers. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Ben. I love your comments.
Comment from Kingsland
Caretakers are anyone that cares and helps other people. They know that we are our brother's keepers. I enjoyed reading this short poetic format. It was well written with a good message... John
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Caretakers are anyone that cares and helps other people. They know that we are our brother's keepers. I enjoyed reading this short poetic format. It was well written with a good message... John
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Thanks so very very much, John.