Sex and Candy
Flash Fiction51 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello DB,
That was an unexpected ending,db ... cold and calculated.
Best wishes for the contest.
Until next time,
Sonali
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hello DB,
That was an unexpected ending,db ... cold and calculated.
Best wishes for the contest.
Until next time,
Sonali
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Unexpected is good. Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from onebrit
Well, revenge certainly is sweet. I didnt see the twist at the end coming. The dialogue is very believable, her character is well developed. Poor girl. Is she planning to kill him I wonder? or just addict him again.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Well, revenge certainly is sweet. I didnt see the twist at the end coming. The dialogue is very believable, her character is well developed. Poor girl. Is she planning to kill him I wonder? or just addict him again.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Sweet, yup. Thanks for the excellent review.
Comment from stroncoso1
Wow! I love how your story flows and develops. It's quite eloquent and the dialogue is gritty and believable. The story is effective and I didn't see it coming. I love how you tempted and twisted the story elements. Nice!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wow! I love how your story flows and develops. It's quite eloquent and the dialogue is gritty and believable. The story is effective and I didn't see it coming. I love how you tempted and twisted the story elements. Nice!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wow, thank you for the compliments and the excellent review.
Comment from mjac777
This story was very well structured from start to finish. Nice balance of prose and dialogue to keep the plot moving forward. A clean write with a dramatic, surprise ending.
What a tale ... just revenge for someone who carelessly and evilly destroys young people's lives before they get out the gate.
Your write is deserving a win.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This story was very well structured from start to finish. Nice balance of prose and dialogue to keep the plot moving forward. A clean write with a dramatic, surprise ending.
What a tale ... just revenge for someone who carelessly and evilly destroys young people's lives before they get out the gate.
Your write is deserving a win.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review. It it's much appreciated.
Comment from AAud
Wow! There's some serious revenge going on up in there!
I love stories that catch me by surprise and this one certainly did. At first I thought maybe Cammie was a sex addict, taking advantage of people in recovery. But then when she mentioned that the other guy's story seemed too practiced, I thought there were both playing the same con. Kudos for the unexpected! Loved it!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wow! There's some serious revenge going on up in there!
I love stories that catch me by surprise and this one certainly did. At first I thought maybe Cammie was a sex addict, taking advantage of people in recovery. But then when she mentioned that the other guy's story seemed too practiced, I thought there were both playing the same con. Kudos for the unexpected! Loved it!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Yup, pretty serious. Thanks for the excellent review.
Comment from amahra
This is my second Beat Served Cold. I loved the one I read and I love this one as well. Great dialogue exchanges between characters as well as a very convincing story.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This is my second Beat Served Cold. I loved the one I read and I love this one as well. Great dialogue exchanges between characters as well as a very convincing story.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from fafa
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I congratulate it for ppor has been recognized like outstanding work the administration,insurance deserves it, I did not see the need to put the protection icon for language,secondhand today is common in the language, greetings
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks.
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
Quite a hard hitting story that opens up with grief, goes sober and then stirs up a dish best served cold. Well written with a good climax and quick character building and a nice twist at the end. Good answer the writing prompt!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Quite a hard hitting story that opens up with grief, goes sober and then stirs up a dish best served cold. Well written with a good climax and quick character building and a nice twist at the end. Good answer the writing prompt!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Muffins
A suspenseful and haunting play on revenge. Cammie represents all the abused ones who secretly and sometimes not so secretly want revenge on the ones who hurt them. The dialogue and setting is smooth, soft like the meeting place the addicts attend. Even her torture of Kevin is steady, slick, a cold suffered she's been waiting it strap him to. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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A suspenseful and haunting play on revenge. Cammie represents all the abused ones who secretly and sometimes not so secretly want revenge on the ones who hurt them. The dialogue and setting is smooth, soft like the meeting place the addicts attend. Even her torture of Kevin is steady, slick, a cold suffered she's been waiting it strap him to. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from James Dooney
well sex and candy are usually good but I can sense this combo to be quite deadly in this case ! You convey this quite well !
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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well sex and candy are usually good but I can sense this combo to be quite deadly in this case ! You convey this quite well !
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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True. Thanks for the excellent review. It is much appreciated.