Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Don't Stop Me Now"The clue is in the title!
30 total reviews
Comment from Drew Delaney
This describes of lot of us women. I'm not that fat anymore, but I do know many who seem to get the weight on their fanny's. It's just in the genes I think. I thought it was a cute poem with rhyming couplets.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This describes of lot of us women. I'm not that fat anymore, but I do know many who seem to get the weight on their fanny's. It's just in the genes I think. I thought it was a cute poem with rhyming couplets.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you Drew for your lovely feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Connie C
What a great little entry for this contest, Debra, and you couldn't have chosen a better picture to accompany your poem. I'm guessing, though, that you are not really a "fat-bottomed girl." My best to you in the contest.
Connie xx
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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What a great little entry for this contest, Debra, and you couldn't have chosen a better picture to accompany your poem. I'm guessing, though, that you are not really a "fat-bottomed girl." My best to you in the contest.
Connie xx
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Connie :) Thanks for your great feedback! Unfortunately I DO have a rather large bottom LOL! Never mind, it's nice and comfy ;) Thankyou for your good luck wishes also... Kindest regards as always, Debra xx
Comment from RodG
I really enjoyed this one, Debra. The Speaker reminds me of many of the women I work out with every morning at the Y. Usually they come with someone else and talk about their success or lack of it, then agree to meet after their showers at Starbuck's for a little pick-me-up. I think it's great you can laugh at yourself. Very well written. Rod
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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I really enjoyed this one, Debra. The Speaker reminds me of many of the women I work out with every morning at the Y. Usually they come with someone else and talk about their success or lack of it, then agree to meet after their showers at Starbuck's for a little pick-me-up. I think it's great you can laugh at yourself. Very well written. Rod
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you Rod :) There's nothing like coffee and cake to console oneself about ones weight gain LOL! Thank you for your great feedback. Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from bard owl
How many men and women struggle with their weight and after a noble battle, give in to something chocolate. When faced with abstinance or indulgence, indulgence has the edge. This one made me smile. I always like rhyme and the subject was one I could identify with. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck to you. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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How many men and women struggle with their weight and after a noble battle, give in to something chocolate. When faced with abstinance or indulgence, indulgence has the edge. This one made me smile. I always like rhyme and the subject was one I could identify with. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck to you. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Linda :) Thank you so much for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from krys123
Debra;
This is a really enjoyable read and I enjoyed it very much. I would like to first wish you good luck in the contest especially because of their requirements we're so difficult.
I found your imagery to be very imaginative and also demonstratively descriptive and brilliantly expressive throughout your writing especially in areas like this:"My legs are most shapely my cardio strong the spare tyres and extra chins - grateful, gone."
Your imagination-ish truly inventive and very creative for this type of writing.
Technically near rhyming was done very well And neither of your rhyming was forced nor labored in your rhythm in your rhyming couplets flowed smoothly throughout your writing and your rhyming helped with the rhythmic flow.
Thank you so much for sharing them posting in May the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Debra;
This is a really enjoyable read and I enjoyed it very much. I would like to first wish you good luck in the contest especially because of their requirements we're so difficult.
I found your imagery to be very imaginative and also demonstratively descriptive and brilliantly expressive throughout your writing especially in areas like this:"My legs are most shapely my cardio strong the spare tyres and extra chins - grateful, gone."
Your imagination-ish truly inventive and very creative for this type of writing.
Technically near rhyming was done very well And neither of your rhyming was forced nor labored in your rhythm in your rhyming couplets flowed smoothly throughout your writing and your rhyming helped with the rhythmic flow.
Thank you so much for sharing them posting in May the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you Alex for your feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Debra White, this is a poem that many will relate to ... the roller coaster dieting and the saboteurs that surround us. I especially liked:
So don't stop me now, please don't tempt me with cake...
(Go on then, a small slice can't hurt, for God's sake!)
(The slipper slope)
A fun entry. As this is a writing prompt entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hello Debra White, this is a poem that many will relate to ... the roller coaster dieting and the saboteurs that surround us. I especially liked:
So don't stop me now, please don't tempt me with cake...
(Go on then, a small slice can't hurt, for God's sake!)
(The slipper slope)
A fun entry. As this is a writing prompt entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much LateBloomer for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Lulube
Good imagery for all that you've done to loose weight. don't knock your butt though, you've had 3 kids. up and down stairs, that will do it. used to do those in track and field to strengthen thighs, calves and butt.
good for you girl I'm proud of you
good luck in the contest
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lulube
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Good imagery for all that you've done to loose weight. don't knock your butt though, you've had 3 kids. up and down stairs, that will do it. used to do those in track and field to strengthen thighs, calves and butt.
good for you girl I'm proud of you
good luck in the contest
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lulube
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Lulube :) Thank you so much for the good luck wishes, the great feedback, letting me know you're proud (blushing!) and for the super duper 6 star award :D
I really appreciate you! Kindest regards as always, Debra x
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welcome Debra
lulube
Comment from misscookie
My goodness I could not stop laughing not only at the picture you post with your poem
But those words are so true and I can surely relate.
Thanks for sharing this delightful poem.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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My goodness I could not stop laughing not only at the picture you post with your poem
But those words are so true and I can surely relate.
Thanks for sharing this delightful poem.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you Cookie for your great feedback :) happy to share a chuckle with you! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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Have a blessed day until next time.
Cookie
Comment from Imogen JH
I had a teacher who looked like the person in the picture. We used to call her "Urco" after the chief ape on "The planet of the apes" Are you sure you want to be a classroom assistant, kids can be cruel. LOL
It's a great fun poem. Brings in a bit of personality and humour to the subject. Nice rhyme that doesn't need too much effort to get through. It's going to do well.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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I had a teacher who looked like the person in the picture. We used to call her "Urco" after the chief ape on "The planet of the apes" Are you sure you want to be a classroom assistant, kids can be cruel. LOL
It's a great fun poem. Brings in a bit of personality and humour to the subject. Nice rhyme that doesn't need too much effort to get through. It's going to do well.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Cheers Imogen for your great feedback :) maybe I should rethink the whole career plan lol! X
Comment from trimple
LOL
What a cracker! I think many women including myself think this way :)
Loved the meter of your well crafted post and thought it to be a fine entry to the prompt.
Good luck my friend, and my appologies for not being able to review of late. I hope though that I am back for a while at least.
Kindest regards
trimple:)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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LOL
What a cracker! I think many women including myself think this way :)
Loved the meter of your well crafted post and thought it to be a fine entry to the prompt.
Good luck my friend, and my appologies for not being able to review of late. I hope though that I am back for a while at least.
Kindest regards
trimple:)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Hi Trimple, thank you for your great feedback :) lovely to hear from you again, hope all is well with you. Hugs, Debra :)
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Hi Deb
Yup all is well indeed, thank you.
I hope you are in top form and look forward to hearing from you again soon my love.
take care
tracey :)xxx