Comment from starkat

Excellent

Nice, upbeat message - easy to say, but can be hard to do - but smiling might help one get off misfortune's turnstile; it's worth a try and if that doesn't work, jumping off into greener grass could offer hope and a way to get around that turnstile.

Excellent 1-6-1 rhyming poem, with cute picture.
Well done. Good luck in the contest ... ;o)

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thank you very much. I loved the alternative that you offered,turnstiles are never that high any way!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

perfect artwork pairing
your poem is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count with strong rhyming of the three lines
I really like the turnstile imagery and the thoughtful message :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thank you very much, Brooke .

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

While
at misfortune's turnstile
smile

What a lovely smile from the pretty girl in the pic. You have kept to the syllable count of 1-6-1 with this very good entry.
good luck
Mary

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 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thank you very much.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

This is a clever fulfilment of the prompt conditions and the end result is quite a thought-provoking poem about how we handle life's ups and downs.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

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 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thank you very much.