Fog
sometimes we're lost in ...19 total reviews
Comment from sgalletti
Hey Art. You did a good job with a prompt that I quite frankly hate. OMG - 575 and acrostic in one three line poem. I don't like either of these forms and here you've got both. That said, you described fog well with some creative imagery and pulled in some alliteration as well. Kudos. Sue
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Hey Art. You did a good job with a prompt that I quite frankly hate. OMG - 575 and acrostic in one three line poem. I don't like either of these forms and here you've got both. That said, you described fog well with some creative imagery and pulled in some alliteration as well. Kudos. Sue
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from Saucey
Well this is a very clever piece, packed with a few words that can literally go in many directions, I appreciate the challenge you give the readers, you nailed it in my opinion Acrostic and 5-7-5. Thanks for sharing.
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Well this is a very clever piece, packed with a few words that can literally go in many directions, I appreciate the challenge you give the readers, you nailed it in my opinion Acrostic and 5-7-5. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from mikemagine
Too many grey areas in life? VERY good. As the world ages, the grey touches it...Very old...How long ago did the grey start to show? Maybe not too long after the hills...When did the grey become dominant? The 20th century? Shortly after the middle of it? I dunno. How long before the very old earth fades out...? Maybe not long?
Mike
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Too many grey areas in life? VERY good. As the world ages, the grey touches it...Very old...How long ago did the grey start to show? Maybe not too long after the hills...When did the grey become dominant? The 20th century? Shortly after the middle of it? I dunno. How long before the very old earth fades out...? Maybe not long?
Mike
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Art, this is an interesting observation about the fuzzy effect of fog on vision. For what it's worth, I think the acrostic would show up more plainly if the 5-7-5 were not centered. But of course, having it not show up plainly may be an intentional part of the foggy message. Good luck to you, Jeanie
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Art, this is an interesting observation about the fuzzy effect of fog on vision. For what it's worth, I think the acrostic would show up more plainly if the 5-7-5 were not centered. But of course, having it not show up plainly may be an intentional part of the foggy message. Good luck to you, Jeanie
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hi there FogKat! I love your acrostic 5-7-5 because the imagery is painted so well in my mind with your words. You must hate driving in the sense fog. It sure is scary just in a car. Your last line is a doozy. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Smiles,
MistyIndy :-)
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Hi there FogKat! I love your acrostic 5-7-5 because the imagery is painted so well in my mind with your words. You must hate driving in the sense fog. It sure is scary just in a car. Your last line is a doozy. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Smiles,
MistyIndy :-)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from LIJ Red
Well, it's descriptive, it's really 5/7/5 and it's acrostic.
I bring this shocking news to make my review long enough.
As to the quality, it's excellent.
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Well, it's descriptive, it's really 5/7/5 and it's acrostic.
I bring this shocking news to make my review long enough.
As to the quality, it's excellent.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from GeraldS
This seems a good entry to me. The theme here can take on a variety of meanings apart from the literal one. A lot of us can relate to being lost in a fog at one time or another. Some more often than not.
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This seems a good entry to me. The theme here can take on a variety of meanings apart from the literal one. A lot of us can relate to being lost in a fog at one time or another. Some more often than not.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from His Grayness
Dear starkat: this is very well done...'TRICKY" as it is supposed to be and clever overall. Good luck in the contest and I'm sorry to be out of deserved sixes! HIS GRAYNESS;
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Dear starkat: this is very well done...'TRICKY" as it is supposed to be and clever overall. Good luck in the contest and I'm sorry to be out of deserved sixes! HIS GRAYNESS;
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Age can do that blur vision. Annoying & especially awkward if one doesn't recognize faces of those they are supposed to know & sometimes well.
Haiku follows form/ interesting subject & clever way of phrasing. Good wishes in contest.
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Age can do that blur vision. Annoying & especially awkward if one doesn't recognize faces of those they are supposed to know & sometimes well.
Haiku follows form/ interesting subject & clever way of phrasing. Good wishes in contest.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2014