Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Pea"The clue is in the title!
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah, yeah, I gotta' agree with you there, Debra. I got a son who will eat nothing, and I do mean no-thing! -- green. Not celery, nor lettuce. No green beans or peas... On the other hand, our daughter loves greens, spinach, broccoli, beans and peas. Go figure, they're likes as as different as nigh and day!
Well done 5/7/5, with a twist.
Best of luck to ya'!:)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hah, yeah, I gotta' agree with you there, Debra. I got a son who will eat nothing, and I do mean no-thing! -- green. Not celery, nor lettuce. No green beans or peas... On the other hand, our daughter loves greens, spinach, broccoli, beans and peas. Go figure, they're likes as as different as nigh and day!
Well done 5/7/5, with a twist.
Best of luck to ya'!:)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thanks Dean for your nice feedback and good luck wishes - I appreciate both :)
1 out of my 3 will eat the peas (and everything else good for her) the other 2 would go without fruit or veg if I let them and eat junk food instead - I weaned them all on the good stuff, don't know what went wrong!
Cheers, Debra :)
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the poem. I love peas. I used to enjoy picking them. My children would not eat peas the regular way. They loved them frozen though. I would give them a small cup full as a snack. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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I love the poem. I love peas. I used to enjoy picking them. My children would not eat peas the regular way. They loved them frozen though. I would give them a small cup full as a snack. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi Ellie, thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Did you thaw out the peas for your kids' snack or did they eat them frozen??
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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They ate them frozen,
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Cool! Literally! I'll have to try it :)
Comment from krys123
Debra;
you is buying up I saw nothing wrong with peas and I can't figure out why today a lot of children don't like it.
I really enjoyed your writing very much. I like it see it very clearly.
The imagery is very clear and demonstratively descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout your 5/7/5 syllabic acrostic poem.
Good luck in the contest for this is a very excellent entry in May the starshine always bright new way through the darkest of times.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Debra;
you is buying up I saw nothing wrong with peas and I can't figure out why today a lot of children don't like it.
I really enjoyed your writing very much. I like it see it very clearly.
The imagery is very clear and demonstratively descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout your 5/7/5 syllabic acrostic poem.
Good luck in the contest for this is a very excellent entry in May the starshine always bright new way through the darkest of times.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you Alex for your feedback and good luck wishes! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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You are so sincerely welcome Debra.
Alex
Comment from acerisestory
This is a fun 5-7-5, Debra -- definitely with a perfect twist.
You've made great use of alliteration with podded perfection and exquisite edible, making for a great flow.
Abhorred by kids!
Well done! Good luck in the contest. Alana
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This is a fun 5-7-5, Debra -- definitely with a perfect twist.
You've made great use of alliteration with podded perfection and exquisite edible, making for a great flow.
Abhorred by kids!
Well done! Good luck in the contest. Alana
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi Alana :) thank you so much for your great feedback and good luck wishes, I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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You are welcome, Debra! Alana
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
It is also an adorable acrostic for Pea
Your kids and I are on the same page - I detest peas to this day
I really like the alliteration in podded perfection - what a clever phrase
great pairing of exquisite edible too
a strong entry in this contest :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
It is also an adorable acrostic for Pea
Your kids and I are on the same page - I detest peas to this day
I really like the alliteration in podded perfection - what a clever phrase
great pairing of exquisite edible too
a strong entry in this contest :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke :) thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I never used to like peas either, but they're one of my favourite veggies now. Can't stand broad beans though! Kind regards, Debra
Comment from Domino 2
Excellent alliteration in this fun read, Debs.
I don't think kids like to eat anything that's green. Maybe they should dye peas red. :-)
Feel free to check out my portfolio occasionally. ;-)
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Excellent alliteration in this fun read, Debs.
I don't think kids like to eat anything that's green. Maybe they should dye peas red. :-)
Feel free to check out my portfolio occasionally. ;-)
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi Ray :) Thanks for your great feedback... yep, green doesn't seem to appeal to kids food wise - unfortunately the same can't be said for bogeys - they'll happily chew on those! Bleurgh!
I'm off to check out your portfolio ;)
Debs x
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Oh, stop it - you just made my face curl up, DeBs.
The one thing that always makes my stomach turn is seeing nose-picking, and watching them eat it is just too much. YEEEEW!
pLEASE DON'T BOTHER CHECKING OUT MY PORTFOLIO - I'm KUST RELIEVED I HADN'T UPSET YOU SOMEHOW IN THE PAST.
YOU'VE NOW FULLY PUT MY MIND AT REST. :-) XX
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Stop shouting at me lol!!!
I'm making a coffee, kids crashed my peace... Be back soon! Ps. Kids are gross aren't they?!
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LOL. I noticed the capslock when I'd finished, but I couldn't be arsed to re-type it. :-) xx
Comment from gypsycaravan
Very clever and interesting prompt and you did a great job of fulfilling the requirements. I agree with your kids, unless they are frozen. Then they taste like candy.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Very clever and interesting prompt and you did a great job of fulfilling the requirements. I agree with your kids, unless they are frozen. Then they taste like candy.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you gypsycaravan for your great feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, Debra, your poor children can't escape any of your motherly, loving thoughts!!!! I loved this one, and I just couldn't help laughing. You have managed to write an acrostic with the exact syllable count, I think this has got to be a winner! Good luck, my dear friend! xsx Sandra. (still laughing!)
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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LOL, Debra, your poor children can't escape any of your motherly, loving thoughts!!!! I loved this one, and I just couldn't help laughing. You have managed to write an acrostic with the exact syllable count, I think this has got to be a winner! Good luck, my dear friend! xsx Sandra. (still laughing!)
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi Sandra :) Thank you of your lovely comments - yes, the kids interrupt my every thought LOL! Glad you enjoyed this one... did you notice my 'petit pois ellipses?!
Thanks also for your good luck wishes - I appreciate it :) Love Debra xx
ps. You're doing very very well in the poem of the month booth - you got my vote! x
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Just had another look, yes, perfect! That should get you another vote!! I wish I'd had a 6 for you, it really is a great contest entry, Debra. Oh, thank you so much for your vote! That was so sweet of you. Maureen and I are level with 27 votes each. I won't mind at all if she wins, she is a nice lady and very brave. Thank you, dear, you really are a special person. :)