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Comment from Gargantuan2
Well, it is a horror and a strange one to boot. I wish you luck in the contest. I did not see anything to edit either so keep up the good work in writing.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Well, it is a horror and a strange one to boot. I wish you luck in the contest. I did not see anything to edit either so keep up the good work in writing.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, G, for the excellent review.
Comment from MisinformedPoet
Ok, that is truly, truly horrible. Absolutely, definetly nothing tame or understated here. Your start gives no clues to the eventual demise of the poor man and i dont know whether or not to feel sorry for him. Great job.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Ok, that is truly, truly horrible. Absolutely, definetly nothing tame or understated here. Your start gives no clues to the eventual demise of the poor man and i dont know whether or not to feel sorry for him. Great job.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, MP, for the excellent review.
Comment from J Patience
How unfortunate! So much "unknown" in this, with the mysteries of how the mind works against us sometimes. Eating one's own limbs after an earthquake... sort of demands the high suspension of disbelief in a real-life-based story. I kept thinking, "Whoa!... AND narcolepsy? AND insatiability? AND an earthquake!?" It would indeed be horrible. It didn't grab me as a story, though, as much as a friend who's telling me about a news article he'd heard of. I sure hope this isn't based on truth.
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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How unfortunate! So much "unknown" in this, with the mysteries of how the mind works against us sometimes. Eating one's own limbs after an earthquake... sort of demands the high suspension of disbelief in a real-life-based story. I kept thinking, "Whoa!... AND narcolepsy? AND insatiability? AND an earthquake!?" It would indeed be horrible. It didn't grab me as a story, though, as much as a friend who's telling me about a news article he'd heard of. I sure hope this isn't based on truth.
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Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, J, for reviewing.
Comment from Leineco
YUCK! I bet he didn't have any salt, or other seasoning!
Good thing he had narcolepsy - at least he could die of
choking before he bled out.
On the other hand. . .the rats got a nice banquet out of it!
LOL
Creepy scenario!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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YUCK! I bet he didn't have any salt, or other seasoning!
Good thing he had narcolepsy - at least he could die of
choking before he bled out.
On the other hand. . .the rats got a nice banquet out of it!
LOL
Creepy scenario!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Leineco, for the excellent review.
Comment from adewpearl
You set the stage well in explaining this man's grim situation
you work back story in effectively
what a horrific cause of death and terrible visual - this is definitely HORROR
Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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You set the stage well in explaining this man's grim situation
you work back story in effectively
what a horrific cause of death and terrible visual - this is definitely HORROR
Brooke
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Brooke, for the excellent review.
Comment from DSMalott
Gruesome but well written.
In such short thoughts, the imagery of the horrible plight was clearly conveyed.
The overlay of a sleeping disease against an eating disease all culminating in death by natural disaster was very creative.
Good job.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Gruesome but well written.
In such short thoughts, the imagery of the horrible plight was clearly conveyed.
The overlay of a sleeping disease against an eating disease all culminating in death by natural disaster was very creative.
Good job.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Doug, for the excellent review.
Comment from ProSongwriter
Well, this was certainly different! But, in a good way. Your story is creative and travels an unexpected road. I shudder to think I would be caught up in such a predicament!!!
You have described the scene well and I had no problem visualizing it. Well-written.
Alan
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Well, this was certainly different! But, in a good way. Your story is creative and travels an unexpected road. I shudder to think I would be caught up in such a predicament!!!
You have described the scene well and I had no problem visualizing it. Well-written.
Alan
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Alan, for the excellent review.
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My pleasure. You earned!
Comment from Domino 2
Poor Gibson sure had a tough life. I wonder if the insurance company would have paid off his mortgage - that would be ironic.
Brilliantly gory ending, but I suppose one way to lose weight is to eat YOURSELF! LOL
Nice one.
Cheers, Ray
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Poor Gibson sure had a tough life. I wonder if the insurance company would have paid off his mortgage - that would be ironic.
Brilliantly gory ending, but I suppose one way to lose weight is to eat YOURSELF! LOL
Nice one.
Cheers, Ray
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Ray, for the excellent review.