Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "senryu (they say you can't buy love)"The clue is in the title!
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Comment from adewpearl
This is hilarious, and so true - grandparents do love to spoil their grandchildren, often to the chagrin of parents who don't want their kids to be little greedy guts :-)
Good wry humor as you suggest this grandmother is not willing to listen to what her child has to say about raising the little one and instilling the right values :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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This is hilarious, and so true - grandparents do love to spoil their grandchildren, often to the chagrin of parents who don't want their kids to be little greedy guts :-)
Good wry humor as you suggest this grandmother is not willing to listen to what her child has to say about raising the little one and instilling the right values :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Brooke, for your great feedback! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from Leineco
LMAO!!!! What a great manipulation of the senryu form! I love that it takes a time delayed second to "get it" (personally, I am a big fan of the subtle quip as opposed to the obvious "lay it all out there" kind.)
Even funnier - it suits the old saying so well - "There is a reason stereotypes exist" LOL - looks like you are experiencing the reality of it :-)
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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LMAO!!!! What a great manipulation of the senryu form! I love that it takes a time delayed second to "get it" (personally, I am a big fan of the subtle quip as opposed to the obvious "lay it all out there" kind.)
Even funnier - it suits the old saying so well - "There is a reason stereotypes exist" LOL - looks like you are experiencing the reality of it :-)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your great comments lorraine :) shame the committee disqualified my entry for having 17 syllables and not "less than 17" as specified in the rules! Lol! Debs x
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Seriously??????? That's ridiculous!
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Debra
Great irony and a chuckle here. In my household, both Grandma's were hard of hearing when it came to buying noisy toys that needed batteries.
I think that saying might be applied to when one develops character ....... my children always seemed to be 'bought' (lol). The bigger kids ..... the grandmas, were viciously competitive for the favours of my babes.
Grandma's and their foibles .... hahahaha! A few tales here I imagine ... might be a good contest in itself. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest. This is certainly 'up there'. I love your clear-eyed wit. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Debra
Great irony and a chuckle here. In my household, both Grandma's were hard of hearing when it came to buying noisy toys that needed batteries.
I think that saying might be applied to when one develops character ....... my children always seemed to be 'bought' (lol). The bigger kids ..... the grandmas, were viciously competitive for the favours of my babes.
Grandma's and their foibles .... hahahaha! A few tales here I imagine ... might be a good contest in itself. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest. This is certainly 'up there'. I love your clear-eyed wit. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Lovi :) thank you so much for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! One grandma tries to 'buy' the kids, the other one gives them an abundance of attention. Guess which grandma the kids prefer to spend time with?! Nonetheless they are both loved equally!
So glad to see you back :) huge hugs back at you xx
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Hi Debra, dear sweet gal
I had the same, one gave the gifts and had no real interest in spending time, the other would tell them stories and be interested in theirs. Yes, I know which one the kids preferred to have in their company. In deference to the other one, she lost her mother when she was two and had no real love and mothering herself .... so she didn't know how it felt.
Thank you for your lovely welcome back. I missed everyone and am pleased to be here once again. I guess I'll spend forever catching up .... as usual. LOL
I hope all is well on the home front ... the kids a little older .... hmmm ... I think that might be better .... then maybe not. LOL you look lovely in your latest profile pic and I'm assuming the 'taking time out for yourself' makes a huge difference. :)) Take care, keep well and safe. Love Lovi xoxox
Comment from Val Crisson
As a grandmother myself, I had to chuckle over this senyru. We do love to spoil our "grands" Very fun senyru which meets all the requirements of the contest, though I've never seen four line senyru before.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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As a grandmother myself, I had to chuckle over this senyru. We do love to spoil our "grands" Very fun senyru which meets all the requirements of the contest, though I've never seen four line senyru before.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Val, thank you for your great feedback. I think it's obligatory to spoil grandchildren isn't it?! That's what my mother-in-law tells me anyway! You're not the first to mention about 4 lines being unusual for a senryu, I followed the prompt guidelines but have now decided to alter my entry to the usual 3 lines! Kindest regards as always, Debra
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It's our God Given Right, Debra! I know the rules said you could do four lines, but for the clarity and reviewers that NEVER read the prompt it was probably a wise move. Hugs
Comment from Domino 2
1st time I've seen a FOUR line senryu, Debs, but I'm no expert and it's OK'd in the rules.
Maybe a little sarcastic dig at grandmother who perhaps thinks sweets and gifts will buy her love.
Mind you, it often does, as my FAVOURITE, LOL, Uncle Ted always gave me a ten shilling note when I saw him, as a kid - a fortune in those days
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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1st time I've seen a FOUR line senryu, Debs, but I'm no expert and it's OK'd in the rules.
Maybe a little sarcastic dig at grandmother who perhaps thinks sweets and gifts will buy her love.
Mind you, it often does, as my FAVOURITE, LOL, Uncle Ted always gave me a ten shilling note when I saw him, as a kid - a fortune in those days
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Ray, thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! You're not the only one to mention about 4 lines being unusual for a senryu, I followed the prompt guidelines but have now decided to alter my entry to the usual 3 lines! Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from sweetwoodjax
oooh, this is great, I love this four line senryu where the grandmother is a gift buying fanatic and loves to buy gifts, lol. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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oooh, this is great, I love this four line senryu where the grandmother is a gift buying fanatic and loves to buy gifts, lol. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you sweetwoodjax for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Hi Debra. I like the sentiment expressed here. Grandmas know nothing of that old saying. They're proof to me its erroneous. Good luck. I think you've got a winner here. Kenny
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Debra. I like the sentiment expressed here. Grandmas know nothing of that old saying. They're proof to me its erroneous. Good luck. I think you've got a winner here. Kenny
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you Kenny for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Andrewajgblue
What a brilliant expression, it's very heartwarming and sweet it's also very true for nearly every grandparent, your presentation was perfect, it was almost like a greeting card, good luck in the competition, it has my vote,
Andrew
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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What a brilliant expression, it's very heartwarming and sweet it's also very true for nearly every grandparent, your presentation was perfect, it was almost like a greeting card, good luck in the competition, it has my vote,
Andrew
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Andrew :) What a lovely review! Thank you so much for your lovely comments, I really appreciate it :) I best go put a copyright on this one... the person who reviewed before you also said this senryu would make a nice card or be great printed on gifts and stuff! How cool would that be ?! LOL!
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It's true, it's great, but don't forget my signed copy lol,:)
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LOL! x
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderful and heartwarming entry for this competition, These beautiful words are true all over the world and in every family, lovely creation Debra, I can see these words on different items in gift shops, you know , on Tea towels or placemats etc, Brilliant!
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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This is a wonderful and heartwarming entry for this competition, These beautiful words are true all over the world and in every family, lovely creation Debra, I can see these words on different items in gift shops, you know , on Tea towels or placemats etc, Brilliant!
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Eric :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I really appreciate your encouraging comments! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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You are so welcome Debra
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words say it well
yes love can not be bought and grandmother can not hear the message
cheers Smoothiecool
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words say it well
yes love can not be bought and grandmother can not hear the message
cheers Smoothiecool
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Smoothiecool :) Thank you for your feedback and good luck wishes.
I note you awarded 4 stars and the review guidelines state : Four Stars (Good: Adjustments needed)
Do you have any suggestions for improvement?
Kindest regards as always :) Debra
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Debra apologise this was always a five slip of finger will go in and correct
cheers..SC >.Faye
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Ah! No problem at all Faye! I just questioned you because I always like to know where I didn't get things right! Thank you though, I do appreciate the upgrade :) kindest regards as always, Debra :)