Powerlessness
Freedom of surrendering. I'm not in charge.15 total reviews
Comment from Chocolate Chip
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest. What you've written here is something wonderful. The visuals created with the wording chosen assists w/ the overall concept of the message. When we're at our wits end, there's always someone in the wings who's in charge. It seems most of us forget it's God! Nicely done! ;) CC
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Wishing you the best of luck in the contest. What you've written here is something wonderful. The visuals created with the wording chosen assists w/ the overall concept of the message. When we're at our wits end, there's always someone in the wings who's in charge. It seems most of us forget it's God! Nicely done! ;) CC
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem of 14 words in 7 lines, divided into two sections, is in good septolet form
good consonance in backed into corner
good alliterative grouping in backed/battle begins/bleeding/
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I like the soulful emotion and the contrast between the two sections as you deliver your thoughtful message of faith
Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Your poem of 14 words in 7 lines, divided into two sections, is in good septolet form
good consonance in backed into corner
good alliterative grouping in backed/battle begins/bleeding/
bended
I like the soulful emotion and the contrast between the two sections as you deliver your thoughtful message of faith
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from JaySee
Very descriptive and powerful poem! I enjoyed your septolet very much. You said a lot in those few words. And the picture that you chose was very apt and fitting for the poem. And you are so right, God is in charge, certainly not us!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Very descriptive and powerful poem! I enjoyed your septolet very much. You said a lot in those few words. And the picture that you chose was very apt and fitting for the poem. And you are so right, God is in charge, certainly not us!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thanks for reviewing. When problems arise, that is a hard to remember.
Comment from lancellot
Well said, and crafted. The two parts do share and promote the same theme. It is sad that for many it take being boxed into a corner before they accept and seek God. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Well said, and crafted. The two parts do share and promote the same theme. It is sad that for many it take being boxed into a corner before they accept and seek God. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank for reviewing. The closer to home the problem the harder to remember that lesson.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Wow! This is so awesome. I love your presentation. And the colour orange is cool. Fourteen words, eh? Unbelievable. That's learning how to cut words. Great job in doing this.
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Wow! This is so awesome. I love your presentation. And the colour orange is cool. Fourteen words, eh? Unbelievable. That's learning how to cut words. Great job in doing this.
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. I liked the orange on black too.