Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Jack & Jill"A collection of short horror fiction
73 total reviews
Comment from costellsgirl33
Congrats to you! I didn't even know you had wrote an entry for this contest!
I must say as a wimpy person that picture horrified me, I'm not really a horror person anymore.
But your take on this tale was great!
Great job as always
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Congrats to you! I didn't even know you had wrote an entry for this contest!
I must say as a wimpy person that picture horrified me, I'm not really a horror person anymore.
But your take on this tale was great!
Great job as always
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A wonderful take. Well constructed, easy flowing and great descriptive
words of horror that give one a chill. Congratulations on this
one Dean. Smiles, Robin :)
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A wonderful take. Well constructed, easy flowing and great descriptive
words of horror that give one a chill. Congratulations on this
one Dean. Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from LoannaLois
Oh yeaaa....the old proverbial broken -crown -moves -man-to- madness trick. This is brilliant. Yes, It did pass my mind's issues back in 1972. I did, indeed wonder what happened to them. Oh, Dean...to just have a modicum of your ability to find a topic to turn into these wonderful stories and poems.
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Oh yeaaa....the old proverbial broken -crown -moves -man-to- madness trick. This is brilliant. Yes, It did pass my mind's issues back in 1972. I did, indeed wonder what happened to them. Oh, Dean...to just have a modicum of your ability to find a topic to turn into these wonderful stories and poems.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Quire's Gal
just stopping by Dean to tell you how much I liked this.
Every word is used so exceptionally well. Not one word wasted.
Really effective imagery. You had me getting sucked in right off the bat with your first sentence.
Bravo and be well sir,
Katherine
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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just stopping by Dean to tell you how much I liked this.
Every word is used so exceptionally well. Not one word wasted.
Really effective imagery. You had me getting sucked in right off the bat with your first sentence.
Bravo and be well sir,
Katherine
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Dru, I really appreciate you having a look at it and sharing your thoughts with me about the story. It was my first ever fifty worder, so I guess it did okay. I had a great deal of help from Phyllis Stewart. She helped to show me a few things she felt were lacking, and lo and behold, she was right, LOL.
Thanks so mcuh again for your kind review.
Comment from Acquired Taste
So the slimy bum has come back for her - silly girl. Then again, she just tumbled and got her dress messed up. His crown may have broken, but his head was just fine. All the better to pull her into the cold well of despair.
Good one.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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So the slimy bum has come back for her - silly girl. Then again, she just tumbled and got her dress messed up. His crown may have broken, but his head was just fine. All the better to pull her into the cold well of despair.
Good one.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Hah ha, "...the cold well of despair", she says to me. Thanks again, Jean. At the time, there were no entries representing the horror genre, and we just couldn't have that, now, could we? I sincerely appreciate it, my friend!
Comment from scarhands
Poor Jill, do you think Jack just wants to be friends again??? haha... I've got a feeling he doesn't want to play nice. Creepy tale, I really dig the well, nothing like a hole in the ground to elicit horror and dread. My only critique would be that I think "alabaster white" may be redundant, you can probably lose the "white" and the image of chalky white hands remains. Always love reading your work, and this story was no different, thanks for inspiring a young horror writer!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Poor Jill, do you think Jack just wants to be friends again??? haha... I've got a feeling he doesn't want to play nice. Creepy tale, I really dig the well, nothing like a hole in the ground to elicit horror and dread. My only critique would be that I think "alabaster white" may be redundant, you can probably lose the "white" and the image of chalky white hands remains. Always love reading your work, and this story was no different, thanks for inspiring a young horror writer!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Hey, than you for checking it out for me. Maybe I'll just go with "pale alabaster", sound good?
I really appreciate the kind comments and excellent feedback.
Thanks again, my friend!
Comment from ann marie mazz
hi dean
you are a hoot
you have me laughing
thank you for that
you are the master of artistry
you have taken jack and jill to another level
thank you for sharing your words and talent
tell jill to look further next time (ha ha)
have a good night
ann marie
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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hi dean
you are a hoot
you have me laughing
thank you for that
you are the master of artistry
you have taken jack and jill to another level
thank you for sharing your words and talent
tell jill to look further next time (ha ha)
have a good night
ann marie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Ha ha, I will tell her, Ann Marie, the very next time that I see her, LOL.
Thanks for such a wonderful review of this crazy thing. I sincerely appreciate that!
Comment from Julia.
Interesting take on the Jack & Jill story. I like it. Suitable creepy (and a perfect 50 words as well, as required). Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Interesting take on the Jack & Jill story. I like it. Suitable creepy (and a perfect 50 words as well, as required). Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your very encouraging review, Julia!
Comment from Dawn Munro
I KNEW that Jill never DID take a tumble! Only Jack could be so clumsy - Jill is graceful; a gazelle (about to be slaughtered...LOL!)
Wonderfully entertaining and clever! *********************!!!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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I KNEW that Jill never DID take a tumble! Only Jack could be so clumsy - Jill is graceful; a gazelle (about to be slaughtered...LOL!)
Wonderfully entertaining and clever! *********************!!!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Thanks for "getting it", Dawn. I really appreciate your encouraging words and review!
Comment from thedreampeddler
Jack and Jill finally done in a way that didn't bore me. Yeah.
Awesome fifty word story. The concept interest me, and I might try my luck, however, I don't think I will have as much success as you will with this awesome Jack/Jill story.
Fantastic job as usual.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Jack and Jill finally done in a way that didn't bore me. Yeah.
Awesome fifty word story. The concept interest me, and I might try my luck, however, I don't think I will have as much success as you will with this awesome Jack/Jill story.
Fantastic job as usual.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Thanks, thedreampeedler, I appreciate your complimentary review, my friend. I've read your work, and I think you would do just fine in this contest. And hey, you just might pull out a win. You never know unless you try, right?
Thanks again, my friend. Much obliged.