Comment from GeorgieBoy

Excellent

This poem tells a message we can all relate to. All of us, without exception wish we would have done some things differently. It is a waste of time chewing on it, like a bone. It gets us no where. If all of us could live like this day is our last, what a wonderful world it would be. I liked it.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thank you GeorgieBoy for your wonderful feedback :) Kindest regards...

reply by GeorgieBoy on 01-Jul-2014

You are welcome

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

A wonderful take on the contest them, well written and carries an important message of not wasting life away. Great entry! Good luck in the voting booth!

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thank you Karen for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A very interesting and true take on the whole notion of 'waste'- how often we forget about our allotted days - the final two lines sum it up well

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thank you so much zany for your great feedback. Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I haven't seen it yet on the NBC poll, but I reckon you're in fine company: I'll bet 63 percent of the people feel they've wasted their lives; 27 percent feel pretty dang good about themselves. The final 10 percent thought they were taking the poll on virginity.

You're doin' just fine!.

Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Hi Jay, Thanks for the great feedback and good luck wishes! Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Wonderful wonderful entry for this competition, it has good humor, it flows really well and the rhyme and rhythm are great, I wish you luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you Eric for your great feedback and good luck wishes. Kindest regards, Debra :)

reply by Eric1 on 02-Jul-2014

you are most welcome Debra.

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Oh, this was absolutely precious. Your rhymes were such a delight! You make great statement that life is not to be wasted, and even we realize we've wasted a lot, there is always a time to start a new, with this knew knowledge, and to treasure each moment.

Favorite lines:

I've realised that life's too short
to throw so much away --
I'm living every moment now,
like it's my final day.

You have a typo in "realize" You have an "s" instead of "Z"

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 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Hi yeltel :) Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback - I'm glad you liked the poem :) Thanks also for pointing out the typo, but I left it as it is because I'm English and we spell realise with an 's' over here! I do appreciate you picking up on it though :) Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

'I've wasted flood {floods} of tears'

I don't think you need to abbreviate 'every' to retain meter, as it has a natural central silent syllable.

Short and very reflective and entertaining thoughts on life's regrets, and your determination to live life to its fullest from now on.

Excellent!

Best wishes, Ray



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 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014

Hi Ray :) thank you for your kind and helpful feedback. I appreciate it :) I popped the s back on 'flood' (don't know where it disappeared to!) and unabbreviated 'every' as suggested. Much better now! Thanks again... :)

reply by Domino 2 on 30-Jun-2014

Thanks for your gracious and kind reply. You make reviewing worthwhile...on top of the silly 'cents' we require to post. :-)

Cheers, Ray.