Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

I have always liked the word cerulean- so much better than sky blue. A bit of mystery to this one, the only blue under the sky the ocean or perhaps mood. Sails kiss horizon- excellent satori, great image ...And a metaphysical kiss.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Thanks!

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hi Dean,
This piece portrays a sense of peace and calm. I felt a subtle word play in the satori line of "blue" and "blew", although, that might just be me! Still, this piece speaks of a certain serenity that is only experienced sailing the open waters. Nice work and delivery with this interesting format. Best of luck, Bill

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Thanks!

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is a pretty haiku, and "cerulean" particularly is such a pretty descriptive word. The image of the sails kissing the horizon is interesting. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Thanks!

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

There is nothing more gorgeous than a lone sailboat on the ocean at sunset. You captured that beautifully with this contest entry. Good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks, Barbara. Based on the way my other haiku contest entry is doing in the voting booth, I will take all of the luck that I can get, my friend.

Much appreciated!

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

a very beautiful haiku, fabulous image to go with your well chosen words.

yet only one blue

'neath spring's cerulean skies

sails kiss horizon

A strong contender, good luck in the contest. Mary

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Mary, and I'll take your good luck wishes and tuck them away for safe keeping, my dear friend. I have a feeling that I'm going to need them.

Comment from GE Parson

Excellent

My Goo Friend Dean,

I have no idea what you said by way of explanation, but I sure like what you said in your HayKu.

Y'all keep banging those keys of your key board,

Your Friend.
Jerry

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Thanks a bunch, Jerry, and I'm trying, I truly am.

I appreciate your kind review and words of encouragement. Much obliged, my friend...

Comment from thedreampeddler

Exceptional

I'm going to give you a six star here. I was not a huge haiku fan until I joined this site. The challenge involved in painting an emotion filled picture using a tiny amount of syllables is something that I find captivating. You seem to be the best writer on that I have found in doing this. For that, I say bravo. The poem truly is fantastic.

thedreampeddler

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014

Hah, well, I'm happy and honored you feel that way, thedreampeddler, but my track record in these contests is spotty at best. So, I will take your kind words and use them to give me the encouragement to continue trying.

Thanks very much for the review and excellent rating, my friend.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Dean - This is a great one, great word choices, loved the imagery.
Good luck in the contest, this is a strong submission.
Thanks for sharing
Maureen

yet only one blue
'neath spring's cerulean skies
sails kiss horizon

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks, Maureen, yet I've been wondering as of late if anyone is picking up the play on words in blue/blew, and my subtle meaning in this one? I hoped it wasn't too vague.

Thanks again for your fabulous words of encouragement. It's always a pleasure to here from you.

reply by Maureen's Pen on 18-Jun-2014

I got it:) So hopefully others will too..
enjoy your evening my friend.
Hugs
m

reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

8>D

You too, Maureen...

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

New to poetry and its many styles and structures, I have grown enjoy the shorter versions such as Haiku with so few words that can paint a giant picture in the reader's mind. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thanks, Ric, and I felt the same way the first time I read a haiku. It's such a hard type of poem to convey meaning in, and words have to chosen carefully for maximum effect. I'm trying, my friend, I truly am!

I really appreciate your encouraging review, Ric.

Comment from faragon

Excellent

The poem was written in true haiku style. It read really well. It has such a relaxing feel in the short lines that are written. I could feel the sway of the water and picture the sunset on the waters. Beautiful setting, beautiful poem!

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014

Thank you, faragon, that's very kind of you to say. That is exactly the type of serenity and peacefulness I was trying to convey here. I also wanted to first and last, or satori line, to be able to be flip-flopped and the poem still read properly.

I really appreciate your fine review!