Comment from linsbm

Excellent

Heart has the connectivity with soul. Both work together, heart to energize the soul and soul to appease the heart. Perfect for the contest entry.

Soul is clearly defined in this poem as justified with a perfect conclusion in the last line. Thanks for sharing.} Lin



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 Comment Written 12-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014

Thank you very much. A great idea the sponsor came up with to write a companion to a previous work. Some good ones being entered.

Comment from MAB

Excellent

Wow I really enjoyed getting the opportunity to read this! Has a unique subtle twist to the feeling at each moment Lively and lucid then into dark and dormant.
The fourth 5-7-5 is probably my favorite. Keep up the good work and best wishes in the contest


SAM

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 Comment Written 12-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014

So pleased you liked this. An interesting contest. I liked this idea. Taking an old poem and writing an answer to it. Thanks a lot.