Short Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "A Simple Awakening"A Collection Of Short Form Poetry
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Comment from McMurry903
That is an awakening many throughout the world need to have. This is a very powerful piece full of inspiration. Perfect use of the triolet form which isn't easy to use effectively. Outstanding meter and message! I enjoyed much and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Brian
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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That is an awakening many throughout the world need to have. This is a very powerful piece full of inspiration. Perfect use of the triolet form which isn't easy to use effectively. Outstanding meter and message! I enjoyed much and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Brian
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much. I've struggled with this meter ever since I first tried it. I was pleased when I read this several times and realized that it was actually correct!! Delighted that you enjoyed it. mikey
Comment from krys123
Mikey, your usage of mono rhymes Are very difficult to do but you seem to accomplish doing them quite well. Neither of your rhymes were forced, labored were strained in your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem Which made it easy for me to read your poem quite clearly. Good luck in the contest for this is a good contender for winning. Thank you for sharing am posting this for everyone to May the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Mikey, your usage of mono rhymes Are very difficult to do but you seem to accomplish doing them quite well. Neither of your rhymes were forced, labored were strained in your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem Which made it easy for me to read your poem quite clearly. Good luck in the contest for this is a good contender for winning. Thank you for sharing am posting this for everyone to May the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I am so pleased that you liked this and found it well written. I know you remember my early pieces when I struggled to get this meter correct. I think this may be the first time that I read through one of mine and thought, "Hey, I think that's it!!!" As always, I appreciate your input and help. Blessings, mikey
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Mikey, you are so sincerely welcome to and I've read your sonnets also and they were excellent
Comment from amada
This is very beautiful, most of all I like the repetition of important lines, those lines that should abide in our hearts; if we want to live in peace. Best wishes in the contest.
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This is very beautiful, most of all I like the repetition of important lines, those lines that should abide in our hearts; if we want to live in peace. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much. If only we woke up one morning and all followed this. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
Wonderful sentiment. If only the world woke up one day and embraced this simple philosophy. This is a perfect use of this form. Thy rhyme and meter are flawless. Excellent! NG
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Wonderful sentiment. If only the world woke up one day and embraced this simple philosophy. This is a perfect use of this form. Thy rhyme and meter are flawless. Excellent! NG
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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So very true. What a wonderful review. Delighted and smiling the silliest of smiles. Thank you!!!! mikey
Comment from pattipac
Your poem of awakening to the potential that love brings to ones heart is beautifully conveyed in your Triolet. Perfect picture selection introduces your poem. Good Luck.
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Your poem of awakening to the potential that love brings to ones heart is beautifully conveyed in your Triolet. Perfect picture selection introduces your poem. Good Luck.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you. I am finally getting that darn meter down once in a while. Glad you liked this one. It would be nice if this came true one day. mikey
Comment from Patti R.
Six stars for this one because the message is so kind and compassionate and everyone needs to really hear it. Six stars also because Triolet is one of my favorite poetic forms, I've written a few - and yours is fantastic. Perfect form, perfect meter and simply flows off the tongue as a Triolet should.
Patti
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Six stars for this one because the message is so kind and compassionate and everyone needs to really hear it. Six stars also because Triolet is one of my favorite poetic forms, I've written a few - and yours is fantastic. Perfect form, perfect meter and simply flows off the tongue as a Triolet should.
Patti
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
Oh Mikey, this is wonderful. I love the message in it and it is written in perfect triolet form. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
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Oh Mikey, this is wonderful. I love the message in it and it is written in perfect triolet form. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming in good triolet pattern
good use of iambic meter and enjambment
effective use of the triolet's repeating lines
and what a thoughtful message of love and peace :-) Brooke
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solid rhyming in good triolet pattern
good use of iambic meter and enjambment
effective use of the triolet's repeating lines
and what a thoughtful message of love and peace :-) Brooke
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, if only it were so, Mikey. The picture you paint
is both admirable and desireable. I'm not much of a poet. In fact a hardly know a triolet from a violent. So I'm afraid I can be of no further assistance.
Best of luck with The Committee.
Peace, Lee
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Ah, if only it were so, Mikey. The picture you paint
is both admirable and desireable. I'm not much of a poet. In fact a hardly know a triolet from a violent. So I'm afraid I can be of no further assistance.
Best of luck with The Committee.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
A fine triolet for this contest and one with a most important message - if only it were true around the world.
Embracing hatred will no longer stand
for love has come to live within our hearts
Good luck.
Steve
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A fine triolet for this contest and one with a most important message - if only it were true around the world.
Embracing hatred will no longer stand
for love has come to live within our hearts
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014