Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Soon"The clue is in the title!
28 total reviews
Comment from Patti R.
I'd better get crackin'! I've entered this contest and haven't had any time to compose anything yet ...
I feel for you. You must be close to your grandfather and I sincerely hope he will regain his glow, his health. He's lucky to have you.
Beautiful tribute poem, D.
Patti
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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I'd better get crackin'! I've entered this contest and haven't had any time to compose anything yet ...
I feel for you. You must be close to your grandfather and I sincerely hope he will regain his glow, his health. He's lucky to have you.
Beautiful tribute poem, D.
Patti
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Aw thank you Patti :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
Comment from rouskin
I like it all but especially this part :I resurrect golden memories refreshing them with tears Best of luck in the contest Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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I like it all but especially this part :I resurrect golden memories refreshing them with tears Best of luck in the contest Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hi Rouskin and thank you for your feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Andrewajgblue
A beautiful written poem, with honest sentiment and heartfelt meaning, I found your wording so touching, and the presentation was amazing with a great picture,
Andrew
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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A beautiful written poem, with honest sentiment and heartfelt meaning, I found your wording so touching, and the presentation was amazing with a great picture,
Andrew
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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H Andrew :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your word count spot on
yes one can renew ones life by washing the past hurts away
like the set out and your well penned words to portray the image well
cheers..Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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good luck in the contest
your word count spot on
yes one can renew ones life by washing the past hurts away
like the set out and your well penned words to portray the image well
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hi Smoothiecool, Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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most welcome Debra
have a blessed week
cheers..SC >> Faye
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Do write a Katie 21 poem, cannot be easy. I love the thought of old memories being refreshed so we can start out again with a smile. Good luck in the contest, Debra. xsx Sandra :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Do write a Katie 21 poem, cannot be easy. I love the thought of old memories being refreshed so we can start out again with a smile. Good luck in the contest, Debra. xsx Sandra :)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you Sandra for your lovely comments and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from GWinterwin
A good poem with a beautiful picture. Good word flow as you talk about a sad time. Good job of showing how much you care. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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A good poem with a beautiful picture. Good word flow as you talk about a sad time. Good job of showing how much you care. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback :) Kind regards, Debra
Comment from Leineco
Beautifully done Debs. . .I could see the tears glistening in your eyes as you wrote this - a mixture of love and pain. Torn between wanting more - but lured by less :-(
Very Nice Write.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Beautifully done Debs. . .I could see the tears glistening in your eyes as you wrote this - a mixture of love and pain. Torn between wanting more - but lured by less :-(
Very Nice Write.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hi Lorraine :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and 6 star rating. I appreciate both. Grandad's not good at the moment... the latter stages of dementia... he's pretty much unresponsive :(
Kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from Val Crisson
I have one suggestion - in the second line change the word from "your" to "mine" It would have a great more import that way. You don't want to change "identity" for a lack of a better word.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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I have one suggestion - in the second line change the word from "your" to "mine" It would have a great more import that way. You don't want to change "identity" for a lack of a better word.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hi Val, thank you for your kind and encouraging feedback. I appreciate your suggestion :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from rama devi
Very touching, my friend. Rich in pathos and emotional depth. Eloquently voiced. This is the best Katie poem I've read thus far...a strong contender for my vote! however, the line: 'dangles by a thread' is cliche--and rewording in a more original way would augment the caliber of the poem another notch.
That cliche line is the only reason I do not award a six, as these lines are fantastically phrased (and nice alliteration as well):
I resurrect golden memories
refreshing them with tears
and the closing Epiphany is powerful, and finely enhanced by the effective repetition and closing note of SOON.
Bravo--and good luck in the contest.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Very touching, my friend. Rich in pathos and emotional depth. Eloquently voiced. This is the best Katie poem I've read thus far...a strong contender for my vote! however, the line: 'dangles by a thread' is cliche--and rewording in a more original way would augment the caliber of the poem another notch.
That cliche line is the only reason I do not award a six, as these lines are fantastically phrased (and nice alliteration as well):
I resurrect golden memories
refreshing them with tears
and the closing Epiphany is powerful, and finely enhanced by the effective repetition and closing note of SOON.
Bravo--and good luck in the contest.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Hi Rama, thank you for your great feedback. I appreciate your advice and agree about cliche. I've been thinking how to reword 'as your life dangles by a thread' and have come up with 'as Life relents granting you reprieve' what do you think? Does it work?!
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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Yes! Excellent edit. I think that sounds eloquent, too! Kindest Regards and Love, rd
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Thank you rama for your kind assistance :) Love, Debra
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:-)))) My pleasure, D. Love, rd
Comment from krys123
Debra, good luck in the contest for this is an excellent contender for winning this prompt. Your choice of pictures made it very easy to understand and how it complements your piece very much. There is so much hopefulness and exhilarating encouragement that I find your written piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing am posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Debra, good luck in the contest for this is an excellent contender for winning this prompt. Your choice of pictures made it very easy to understand and how it complements your piece very much. There is so much hopefulness and exhilarating encouragement that I find your written piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing am posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hi Alex, thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
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You are so sincerely welcome Debra