Bible Stories in Rhyme
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Dare to be a David"Poetry and Stories from the Bible
27 total reviews
Comment from MizKat
Hi Carolyn,
This is a beautiful well written and very interesting poem. I loved every word of it and what a joy to read. You did a great job in writing this.
Kat
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
Hi Carolyn,
This is a beautiful well written and very interesting poem. I loved every word of it and what a joy to read. You did a great job in writing this.
Kat
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
-
Thank you Kat for your wonderful comments and shining award. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. Love, Carolyn
Comment from DR DIP
N this is beautifully written, obviously telling the biblical story of how David slew Goliath and you have written it in my favourite rhyme well done n well done it had me in it really is a skill to tell astory in rhyme because not only are you searching for the appropriate rhyming word but its still has to make sense and flow which you have so admirably achieved
well done
dip
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
N this is beautifully written, obviously telling the biblical story of how David slew Goliath and you have written it in my favourite rhyme well done n well done it had me in it really is a skill to tell astory in rhyme because not only are you searching for the appropriate rhyming word but its still has to make sense and flow which you have so admirably achieved
well done
dip
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
-
Thanks DR DIP , I appreciate your comments. Yes it is a challenge to stay true to the word and yet rhyme. I love both, Gods word and poetry. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Winslow
Dear Notes,
For with God's sword in our hand we can battle giants and win for good. Good rhyming and cadence.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
Dear Notes,
For with God's sword in our hand we can battle giants and win for good. Good rhyming and cadence.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
-
Thanks for this wonderful review and awesome award. I appreciate you. :-)
Carolyn
Comment from yolieday
I receive this. Excellent piece and I dare to be like David. I love the use of rhyme and how you used biblical situations on how we should live today. Thank you for the share and the uplift.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
I receive this. Excellent piece and I dare to be like David. I love the use of rhyme and how you used biblical situations on how we should live today. Thank you for the share and the uplift.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
-
yollieday, I am honored by your generous stars and the wonderful comments you have made. Thank you so very much. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Nosha17
Possessing courage and valour are necessary attributes to deal with the trials of life, just as you said, like David. Your rhymes worked well and I enjoyed the story of David within the poem. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
Possessing courage and valour are necessary attributes to deal with the trials of life, just as you said, like David. Your rhymes worked well and I enjoyed the story of David within the poem. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
-
Thanks Faye, for your insightful comments and generous rating. :-) Carolyn
Comment from GracieAnn
Carolyn, this is rhymed well and gives the narrative story of David's interesting life. It us true like the old song says,when others see a shepherd boy, God may see a king. Don't
you enjoy Roy! Well done, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
Carolyn, this is rhymed well and gives the narrative story of David's interesting life. It us true like the old song says,when others see a shepherd boy, God may see a king. Don't
you enjoy Roy! Well done, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
-
Hi there GracieAnn, I am delighted you enjoyed 'Dare to be a David.' Yes, I love Roy (and you too). :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a beautiful piece of writing that the author has created with this post. We should all aim to emulate David in fighting for God and trusting that he will look after us all the way.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
This is a beautiful piece of writing that the author has created with this post. We should all aim to emulate David in fighting for God and trusting that he will look after us all the way.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
-
Thanks Tom, I am happy you liked this one and I enjoyed your comments. :-) Carolyn
-
I enjoyed reviewing this. Well done.
Tom.
Comment from royowen
Thank you so much Carolyn, I've never had a poem devoted for me, I've written poems for others, unfortunately my name's not David, oh well, sigh!
I enjoyed this little biblical trip through one of the favourite stories, although I've never actually read one written as one, well done with this one, a good start my new week. Nice rhyme and rhythm! You're off the mark! Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
Thank you so much Carolyn, I've never had a poem devoted for me, I've written poems for others, unfortunately my name's not David, oh well, sigh!
I enjoyed this little biblical trip through one of the favourite stories, although I've never actually read one written as one, well done with this one, a good start my new week. Nice rhyme and rhythm! You're off the mark! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
-
Hi there Roy,
I am delighted you enjoyed 'Dare to be a David'. I hope to write more of the old Bible stories. And I am happy to be the first. I may not state it again, but all of these can be for you. Love you, Carolyn
Comment from jmdg1954
Carolyn... Wonderful poem telling the story of David and Goliath. The cadence in the poem kept the reader (me) moving along. Your rhyming was impeccable.
The following two sentences worked wonders for me as I'm going through a rough time right now :
So when you're feeling small, and insignificant, or doubt your value and worth
Dare to be a David, and battle for the Lord, while you are on this earth
Thanks, John
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
Carolyn... Wonderful poem telling the story of David and Goliath. The cadence in the poem kept the reader (me) moving along. Your rhyming was impeccable.
The following two sentences worked wonders for me as I'm going through a rough time right now :
So when you're feeling small, and insignificant, or doubt your value and worth
Dare to be a David, and battle for the Lord, while you are on this earth
Thanks, John
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
-
Hi John, so glad you enjoyed this one. I thought I had written enough 'nonsense' for awhile and decided to get back down to business. Smile.
I hope things smooth out for you. Love, Carolyn
Comment from Sylvia Page
Caroline this a a wonderful way to tell a story from the scriptures. I think with all your expertise you exhibit in this beautiful poem you should do more of these interesting poems.
I don't visit as often as before because God has chosen me to bear some of His suffering He endures for the wrongs of this world. Please pray for Russia, including the country you live in. This is an urgent plea.
Love, peace and blessings,
Sylvia
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
Caroline this a a wonderful way to tell a story from the scriptures. I think with all your expertise you exhibit in this beautiful poem you should do more of these interesting poems.
I don't visit as often as before because God has chosen me to bear some of His suffering He endures for the wrongs of this world. Please pray for Russia, including the country you live in. This is an urgent plea.
Love, peace and blessings,
Sylvia
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
-
Hi there dear Sylvia,
I will cherish the wonderful golden cross you have awarded.
Your thoughtful words, and solicitation for prayers, for our country, Russia, and others will not go unfulfilled. I was in the Ukraine in 1994, I feel for all of them and can not imagine what they are going through. I pray peace will reign and for your safety as well my dear friend, Love, Carolyn