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senryu (ungrateful heirs miss)

senyru 5/7/5 contest

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Comment from royowen
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An interesting and clever senryu as a contest entry! This is a good qualifying work that should do well, despite it being a limiting poetic form! Good luck in the contest, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 14-May-2014

reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Thank you, Roy!
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
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ungrateful heirs miss
old cupboard full of silver
butler SALIVATES Suggestion only

Loved the images of unadulterated gre4ed.

Regards:

 Comment Written 14-May-2014

reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Good, I wanted people to THINK. No, I'm not sure the butler is greedy or just disgusted. I guess, I was looking for a double meaning. Thank you for the review.
reply by STEPHEN A CARTER on 14-May-2014
    Dear Anon: Good luck. Just posted 'The Springfield Foal' Part 2. Thanks.

    With Respect: Steve c
Comment from lancellot
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So simple and yet in these three little lines there is a whole back story, of greed wealth, and by the butler a witness who probably wishes he wasn't there. Well done.

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 Comment Written 14-May-2014

reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Thank you, that is the beauty of senyru - little said in few words.
Comment from kiwijenny
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So as the old adage says...did the butler do it.....??
Old cupboard full of silver............
Butler turns his eyes.....
Good artwork
God bless

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 Comment Written 14-May-2014

reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    I was shooting for irony - do you think he took the silver? LOL
reply by kiwijenny on 14-May-2014
    Irony...would mean he took the wrought :o)
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Exactly, did he or didn't he????
reply by kiwijenny on 14-May-2014
    They missed it he turned his eyes so he chose to leave it...I think he did not take the silver because he would honor his master
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Agree, maybe he was a faithful servant? That's what I love about senyru, it's really up to the reader to make the "call" Hugs