National Poetry Month
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "A Love so Deep"Thirty poems in Thirty Days
18 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Powerful love poem, for not many would give their lives for someone else. My hubby would, I'm sure. For our kid, of course, but also for me, and I don't like that and have told him so. Let's just hope we never have to find out what we would do in such a situation.
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Powerful love poem, for not many would give their lives for someone else. My hubby would, I'm sure. For our kid, of course, but also for me, and I don't like that and have told him so. Let's just hope we never have to find out what we would do in such a situation.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from donette1914
very sweet and tender and what better way to love someone is to die for them this is true love and well written it was a pleasure
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very sweet and tender and what better way to love someone is to die for them this is true love and well written it was a pleasure
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Sweet, I think you may have a contender here. I liked the simplicity of your love poem. Souls now one, were two.
Well written my friend. Good luck, Carolyn
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Sweet, I think you may have a contender here. I liked the simplicity of your love poem. Souls now one, were two.
Well written my friend. Good luck, Carolyn
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
Loving someone you can't help but wonder how can it be that I loved you more today than yesterday but it grows with time. As you stated there were two now blended into one and yes true love you do give your life for them. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Terrie
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Loving someone you can't help but wonder how can it be that I loved you more today than yesterday but it grows with time. As you stated there were two now blended into one and yes true love you do give your life for them. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Terrie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from lancellot
Very nice, I like the smooth form and sharp contrast of the presentation. That may matter to a committee voter.
notes:
more than the sea {is} blue?
How does this sound to you with that in there?
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Very nice, I like the smooth form and sharp contrast of the presentation. That may matter to a committee voter.
notes:
more than the sea {is} blue?
How does this sound to you with that in there?
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Glasstruth
The rhyming has a nice ring to it, but because you of your deep concentration on the sound, the meaning lacks a bit. Good luck with the contest. Les
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The rhyming has a nice ring to it, but because you of your deep concentration on the sound, the meaning lacks a bit. Good luck with the contest. Les
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from DonandVicki
Nicely composed love poem that could easily be made into a greeting card. I hope that you are giving this poem to someone special. Don
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Nicely composed love poem that could easily be made into a greeting card. I hope that you are giving this poem to someone special. Don
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from krys123
Debbie, I find it difficult to write mono rhymes but you did an excellent job in doing so. Neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained and that made your rhythm flow smoothly throughout your poem. All this made it clearly to read your poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for others may always find happiness wherever you go.
Alex
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Debbie, I find it difficult to write mono rhymes but you did an excellent job in doing so. Neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained and that made your rhythm flow smoothly throughout your poem. All this made it clearly to read your poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for others may always find happiness wherever you go.
Alex
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
