National Poetry Month
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Belief vs Reality "Thirty poems in Thirty Days
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Comment from mfowler
This is clever. When I got to the crux of your poem as expressed in the end lines, I flipped to the famous speech by Shyloch (spelling?)in "The Merchant of Venice" when Shakespeare has him assert his humanity in the face of accusations of treachery because he's a Jew. He asks :"If you prick us, do we not bleed? if you tickle us, do we not laugh? etc." You ask in here if people believe in this or that, idealistic visions of "blooming flowers,floating butterflies" or harsher ideas about human existence eg "many humans are consumed by evil". You then assert that no matter what the differences are in the way we view each other, or life for that, we are still essentially the same. Hence, we all bleed alike. Excellent ideas, expressed succinctly and lyrically in this good poem.
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This is clever. When I got to the crux of your poem as expressed in the end lines, I flipped to the famous speech by Shyloch (spelling?)in "The Merchant of Venice" when Shakespeare has him assert his humanity in the face of accusations of treachery because he's a Jew. He asks :"If you prick us, do we not bleed? if you tickle us, do we not laugh? etc." You ask in here if people believe in this or that, idealistic visions of "blooming flowers,floating butterflies" or harsher ideas about human existence eg "many humans are consumed by evil". You then assert that no matter what the differences are in the way we view each other, or life for that, we are still essentially the same. Hence, we all bleed alike. Excellent ideas, expressed succinctly and lyrically in this good poem.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from Glasstruth
Here, you ask every reader what he/she believes in. You don't give any answers, as it's up to us to decide what each believes in. Belief vs Reality, that's a topic one could write pages of. Love how you end it with:
"one truth is universal
to us all, if you cut yourself
you will bleed."
Really well written. Les
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Here, you ask every reader what he/she believes in. You don't give any answers, as it's up to us to decide what each believes in. Belief vs Reality, that's a topic one could write pages of. Love how you end it with:
"one truth is universal
to us all, if you cut yourself
you will bleed."
Really well written. Les
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from JW
Ok - that is an interesting point.
There is no doubt that if one cuts themselves, they will bleed. Unless, of course, one has died and hasn't realized it yet. ... PS. I know a few people like that.
Anyhow, fortunately, or unfortunately - I know some others who also fit the other categories.
I.E. On the day I was born, my father disclaimed me as being his son. JW
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Ok - that is an interesting point.
There is no doubt that if one cuts themselves, they will bleed. Unless, of course, one has died and hasn't realized it yet. ... PS. I know a few people like that.
Anyhow, fortunately, or unfortunately - I know some others who also fit the other categories.
I.E. On the day I was born, my father disclaimed me as being his son. JW
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from krys123
Debbie, funny you should write about this why dreamed about bleeding last night during a fire in a warehouse. anyway I found your poem very interesting and in a way very inspirational and stimulating because of the provocatively aspects of the words in your poem. It has what you mentioned in your author's notes about being true. Thank you for sharing and posting this for others may the Lord be with you on this happy Easter Sunday.
Alex
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Debbie, funny you should write about this why dreamed about bleeding last night during a fire in a warehouse. anyway I found your poem very interesting and in a way very inspirational and stimulating because of the provocatively aspects of the words in your poem. It has what you mentioned in your author's notes about being true. Thank you for sharing and posting this for others may the Lord be with you on this happy Easter Sunday.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from madhatter1977
We are all one I guess, when one bleeds we all do. Food for thought here, Debbie and well expressed with the red and black background. Quite a disquieting read. Best wishes, Pete
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We are all one I guess, when one bleeds we all do. Food for thought here, Debbie and well expressed with the red and black background. Quite a disquieting read. Best wishes, Pete
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from MM lives on :)
Hello Debbie, I see the metaphor behind this poetic gem my dear friend...yes if we cut ourselves we will bleed tears and sorrow, we must life ourselves and grow like a floral arrangement and flourish...
Bravo!
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Hello Debbie, I see the metaphor behind this poetic gem my dear friend...yes if we cut ourselves we will bleed tears and sorrow, we must life ourselves and grow like a floral arrangement and flourish...
Bravo!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
the inevitability of what is... for one thing, you do indeed bleed if you cut yourself... and yes there are some certainty's in life and death, just as plain to know... I tend to just let things unfold as they come into vision for we have no true control over life or our demise, but we do have choice to our attitude towards everything in-between... so I say see everyday as a privilege and honor thyself to personal growth through anything that crosses our path... be it good, bad or indifferent... very lingering poem Debbie.
With our thoughts we create,
patterns to life,
James xx
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Hi Debbie,
the inevitability of what is... for one thing, you do indeed bleed if you cut yourself... and yes there are some certainty's in life and death, just as plain to know... I tend to just let things unfold as they come into vision for we have no true control over life or our demise, but we do have choice to our attitude towards everything in-between... so I say see everyday as a privilege and honor thyself to personal growth through anything that crosses our path... be it good, bad or indifferent... very lingering poem Debbie.
With our thoughts we create,
patterns to life,
James xx
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
It is all a matter of perception, but there will always be some that judge us even though we do all bleed red. Nicely done and thanks for sharing that message with others.
teresa
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It is all a matter of perception, but there will always be some that judge us even though we do all bleed red. Nicely done and thanks for sharing that message with others.
teresa
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from me_tudor
This was definitely a different poem and I loved the artwork. It's amazing how things come to us and demand that we right them down. But I would take it that no matter what you believe or who is right or wrong, under it all we're just flesh and blood and we all bleed.
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This was definitely a different poem and I loved the artwork. It's amazing how things come to us and demand that we right them down. But I would take it that no matter what you believe or who is right or wrong, under it all we're just flesh and blood and we all bleed.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think this came from your heart and it makes the reader wonder and reflect their belief system. There was always been the argument about nature vs nurture. The more I work with young children the more I wonder.
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I think this came from your heart and it makes the reader wonder and reflect their belief system. There was always been the argument about nature vs nurture. The more I work with young children the more I wonder.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014