National Poetry Month
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Aging Pages"Thirty poems in Thirty Days
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Comment from royowen
The journey of life is the great teacher, we need to be ready to live it as if we are going to live for a thousand years, but of course we simply don't know how long. Life should be our teacher, rather than our master! Good descriptive language in clearly showing what you've learnt, good abab rhyme scheme, nice flow and meter! Blessings, Debbie, Roy.
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The journey of life is the great teacher, we need to be ready to live it as if we are going to live for a thousand years, but of course we simply don't know how long. Life should be our teacher, rather than our master! Good descriptive language in clearly showing what you've learnt, good abab rhyme scheme, nice flow and meter! Blessings, Debbie, Roy.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
Comment from grannyfrannie
This is simply lovely. I can associate with it personally as I am sure many others can do as well. I especially like the reference to your "cover" being worn. True words, beautifully written. Thank you.
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This is simply lovely. I can associate with it personally as I am sure many others can do as well. I especially like the reference to your "cover" being worn. True words, beautifully written. Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
Comment from risktaker
Beautiful depiction of the aging process. I love the flow . the structure, the tone. I relate to lesson's learned, treasured memories, and hope for the future. I love the positive focus toward the future. Great imagery. Well-written.
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Beautiful depiction of the aging process. I love the flow . the structure, the tone. I relate to lesson's learned, treasured memories, and hope for the future. I love the positive focus toward the future. Great imagery. Well-written.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
Comment from krys123
Debbie, I found your phone to rewritten very beautifully and and the longevity, which is symbolically stated, Of your life dramatically lives on forever. I found your poem to be also very inventiveness and creative and shows how resourceful one can be writing this type of format. Your rhymes are neither forced, labored or sprained in your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem. One Line that could need a small change because it seems awkward is:"There's more to this volume of self", could be stated
as: "There is more volume to the self". Just a suggestion.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for others it may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Debbie, I found your phone to rewritten very beautifully and and the longevity, which is symbolically stated, Of your life dramatically lives on forever. I found your poem to be also very inventiveness and creative and shows how resourceful one can be writing this type of format. Your rhymes are neither forced, labored or sprained in your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem. One Line that could need a small change because it seems awkward is:"There's more to this volume of self", could be stated
as: "There is more volume to the self". Just a suggestion.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for others it may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
Comment from sgalletti
What a lovely, nostalgic piece of poetry Debbie! You do not allow form to overtake the message but allow the poem to take its own voice. I respect that! Beautiful presentation. Sue
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What a lovely, nostalgic piece of poetry Debbie! You do not allow form to overtake the message but allow the poem to take its own voice. I respect that! Beautiful presentation. Sue
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
Comment from T.J.Mullane
I had written that your poem explains how I see my life in poetic song, and expressed just how good you wrote. However, FanStory request that I add comment, as they feel a short compliment isn't efficient. So on behalf of the committee I once again say; very well done.
T. J. Mullane
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I had written that your poem explains how I see my life in poetic song, and expressed just how good you wrote. However, FanStory request that I add comment, as they feel a short compliment isn't efficient. So on behalf of the committee I once again say; very well done.
T. J. Mullane
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2014