Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "To Fill 'Til Full"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from l.raven
OMG, Michael...have to catch my breath...now this took a lot of thought and work....Damn Michael...you truly can write...I know about this form...it's tough one...you so did it justice...Bravo!!! a wonderful write...so very well written...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
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OMG, Michael...have to catch my breath...now this took a lot of thought and work....Damn Michael...you truly can write...I know about this form...it's tough one...you so did it justice...Bravo!!! a wonderful write...so very well written...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
Comment from Selina Stambi
mankind slithers slimy seeking bliss .. love this line
Rejoice, for Christ has risen from the dead,
His blood's been shed, your victory is won.
Proclaim your name, believer, Satan's fled!.. I love the majestic, solemn grandeur in these lines
There's no time left to try to learn to pray - yep!
A void with naught but God to fill 'til full - hurrah and amen!
Dear Mikey,
I am more than impressed, friend! You are really soaring with each post, rising higher and higher.
Well done!
Sonali
with (mussels), lobsters, fishes
(Its) payment due for man (no apostrophe)
Your(e) without care, you've fooled
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mankind slithers slimy seeking bliss .. love this line
Rejoice, for Christ has risen from the dead,
His blood's been shed, your victory is won.
Proclaim your name, believer, Satan's fled!.. I love the majestic, solemn grandeur in these lines
There's no time left to try to learn to pray - yep!
A void with naught but God to fill 'til full - hurrah and amen!
Dear Mikey,
I am more than impressed, friend! You are really soaring with each post, rising higher and higher.
Well done!
Sonali
with (mussels), lobsters, fishes
(Its) payment due for man (no apostrophe)
Your(e) without care, you've fooled
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Dam--this had to take a lot of time. I'm speechless. Did you know of the four blood moons that are coming, predicting in the bible. Two of them are coming this month and the last in 2015. Be ready, it ia all falling into place, including Russia, which is preparing to do battle with Israel. This too much for me to take in. I got to save this unit so, i can take my time and really study this piece of art. Gezz, this looks great and reads even better. This is a masterpiece, I'm in total shock. Collect your doubloons, sir, you really earned the. Seven sonnets, outrageous, you will have me speaking in tongues. I'm in awe ... wackydo, Scoutmaster. You want to buy some Girl Scout cookies ...
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Dam--this had to take a lot of time. I'm speechless. Did you know of the four blood moons that are coming, predicting in the bible. Two of them are coming this month and the last in 2015. Be ready, it ia all falling into place, including Russia, which is preparing to do battle with Israel. This too much for me to take in. I got to save this unit so, i can take my time and really study this piece of art. Gezz, this looks great and reads even better. This is a masterpiece, I'm in total shock. Collect your doubloons, sir, you really earned the. Seven sonnets, outrageous, you will have me speaking in tongues. I'm in awe ... wackydo, Scoutmaster. You want to buy some Girl Scout cookies ...
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
Comment from seaglass
Wheeee! This is your best work yet, Bro. I'm not a sonnet fan but this turned out beautiful. The bible, already written in poetic free verse in a way, lends to so many possibilities with poetry styles, it's endless. This is also very meaningful during the Easter. GOOD JOB.
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Wheeee! This is your best work yet, Bro. I'm not a sonnet fan but this turned out beautiful. The bible, already written in poetic free verse in a way, lends to so many possibilities with poetry styles, it's endless. This is also very meaningful during the Easter. GOOD JOB.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This is an epic poem/sonnet. Your piece de resistance (I don't know how to add accents)Your choice of words was superb and it rhymed very well. It also conveyed a message for how we should live our lives on earth and adhere to God's will for He created all the wonders. I don't know where you find the time to write so much. Great write. Faye
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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This is an epic poem/sonnet. Your piece de resistance (I don't know how to add accents)Your choice of words was superb and it rhymed very well. It also conveyed a message for how we should live our lives on earth and adhere to God's will for He created all the wonders. I don't know where you find the time to write so much. Great write. Faye
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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I'm not used to working so hard. They say it's good for me!!! I suppose so. I certainly appreciate the difficulty that rhyme and meter present now. I am delighted that you enjoyed it. Thank you so much! Smiles!! mikey
Comment from emrpoems
Captivating presentation of the Crown of Heroic Sonnets.
Satisfies all the requirements and tells a good story.
A superb job in bringing together so many Bible stories.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Captivating presentation of the Crown of Heroic Sonnets.
Satisfies all the requirements and tells a good story.
A superb job in bringing together so many Bible stories.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much! The most work I have ever done. I certainly learned a lot about what it takes to produce top quality work! I need to take a break and blather off some nice ten minute free verse. Hahaha. mikey
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Good job. I do not have the nerve to try like that
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I will attest to the fact it was heroic. LOL It read well to me Michael. I am so backed up today I can't count the iambics but I have lots of praise for you . This is a tremendous feat and I applaud you. You always do very well because you have talent. Good Job Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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I will attest to the fact it was heroic. LOL It read well to me Michael. I am so backed up today I can't count the iambics but I have lots of praise for you . This is a tremendous feat and I applaud you. You always do very well because you have talent. Good Job Nancy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you! I'm pretty sure it all has ten beats. It's mostly iambic. I had to speak in that strange dialect a few times, but most of it sounded pretty smooth to my poor wife!! mikey
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is a truth-infused write for those who embrace Scriptures. Too many would like to believe that mankind is inherently good. Not so. Romans says: "All have sinned and fallen short". We do not have to teach children how to be selfish. You have been brave enough to counter a type political correctness that accuses all Christians to be bigots, my friend. Without sounding alarmist, I feel that real philosophical and tangible persecution has begun in our country-more red than blue.
I bristle at the movie "Noah". It took so many liberties with the Apocrypha (false books of the Bible). It made God out to be a monster, and Noah to be a raving zealot with fear on his mind. Truth mixed with error still stinks. I was offended. It was a sci-fi poor substitute. They didn't get it right. It shouldn't surprise us since it was produced by an Atheist.
You are a paradox to me. I do appreciate your sensitivity and timely input in this Easter season, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Mikey, this is a truth-infused write for those who embrace Scriptures. Too many would like to believe that mankind is inherently good. Not so. Romans says: "All have sinned and fallen short". We do not have to teach children how to be selfish. You have been brave enough to counter a type political correctness that accuses all Christians to be bigots, my friend. Without sounding alarmist, I feel that real philosophical and tangible persecution has begun in our country-more red than blue.
I bristle at the movie "Noah". It took so many liberties with the Apocrypha (false books of the Bible). It made God out to be a monster, and Noah to be a raving zealot with fear on his mind. Truth mixed with error still stinks. I was offended. It was a sci-fi poor substitute. They didn't get it right. It shouldn't surprise us since it was produced by an Atheist.
You are a paradox to me. I do appreciate your sensitivity and timely input in this Easter season, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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There came a point where I became caught up in the mechanics of all of it. The daDums and rhymes and form and all of that. I hope I didn't sacrifice too much content along the way. My main point overall is that it is rather simple when all is said and done. Believe and follow what is right and it should work out just fine. I had the feeling watchin the trailers that "Noah" was a bunch of Hollywood nonsense. Too bad, it is such a great story that has plenty of drama and intrigue without twisting it at all. But, they always seem to do that. It always has the same effect too. They sensationalize something sensational and somehow make it less so. So strange for an Atheist to produce a Biblical piece, seems like a Christian producing an homage to the devil. Doesn't make sense. mikey
Comment from Sasha
My goodness! You are such a gifted writer. This is a superb heroic sonnet. I really don't know what to say other than I just loved it. Marvelous work from beginning to end. I love the repeating lines...something soothing about them. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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My goodness! You are such a gifted writer. This is a superb heroic sonnet. I really don't know what to say other than I just loved it. Marvelous work from beginning to end. I love the repeating lines...something soothing about them. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you! I didn't just throw this out there I must admit. I worked on it until I could do no more. I am so delighted that you enjoyed it. Big smiles!! mikey
Comment from tfawcus
An epic write, Mikey! I know how hard these linked series of sonnets are. To retell such a famous biblical story using this form is quite some undertaking and you have done a superb job of it. I loved these lines in Sonnet 6:
"How dare you deign to flaunt superior,
tattooed in scripture, inked in glittered gold.
Donned higher heels cause swayed posterior,
sashay...your own redemption you've foretold."
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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An epic write, Mikey! I know how hard these linked series of sonnets are. To retell such a famous biblical story using this form is quite some undertaking and you have done a superb job of it. I loved these lines in Sonnet 6:
"How dare you deign to flaunt superior,
tattooed in scripture, inked in glittered gold.
Donned higher heels cause swayed posterior,
sashay...your own redemption you've foretold."
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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I am so pleased you enjoyed this. It truly was a lot of work. I don't know what possessed me. I hope it doesn't posses me again!! Thank you so much and for all the stars as well. mikey
